| Re: The Gentleman by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
17-Feb-03/12:05 PM |
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| Re: Sharks For Libido by scitz |
16-Feb-03/7:15 AM |
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Too long to be a haiku but the images are good.
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| Re: Gloria's Falling Sun by OneFingerAnswer |
16-Feb-03/6:56 AM |
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Neat work, and you've got possibly the best username on this site!
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| Re: a comment on His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger |
16-Feb-03/6:54 AM |
Thanks Cad, I'll have a look about for the names given to destructive winds and I'll edit this in a few days or so because this is (as it says) a draft. I never actually thought of 4 winds, thank you for the idea.
Ta.
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| Re: Prelude to a Legend by ThoughtfulSoul |
16-Feb-03/12:34 AM |
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There are some great lines in here, but too much unnecessary description of feeling (as god'swife says). I can see that you'll make a good writer or poet if you try. This deserves a 7, ideas and images are there, they just need to be selected and emphasised more (yeah, I know, emotion's a bastard to get down onto paper, I can't do it very well. Actually I can't write poetry very well. Oh well.)
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| Re: Mebi by ==Doylum |
16-Feb-03/12:18 AM |
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So descriptive! Hee hee hee...9 for laughter...and because there's not a nine yet.
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| Re: Parting the Curtains by Blue Magpie |
16-Feb-03/12:12 AM |
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
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| Re: a comment on Beauty, sleeping by Ranger |
16-Feb-03/12:07 AM |
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Yeah, the whole thing is a bit random. The big question is: do you get those lines?
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| Re: a comment on My Mind by Deb_djb3113 |
16-Feb-03/12:02 AM |
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Fear of Garbage? Damn fine name.
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| Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik |
15-Feb-03/5:03 PM |
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There are some brilliant images in here, not all of them go together, but sod it, who cares? Good stuff. 9
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| Re: Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
15-Feb-03/4:49 PM |
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| Re: The Errant Knight by Thyme |
13-Feb-03/12:46 PM |
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| Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof |
10-Feb-03/12:49 PM |
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Mr. Christof, this is one of the finest works of poetry that I've ever seen...you, sir, are a genius. May I ask as to whose poems you draw inspiration from? This is the template for the poems that I would love to write but don't have the ability-pleeeease let me know how you learnt to write like this! 10
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| Re: Of Bobjims (An actual poem this time!?!) by Bobjim |
10-Feb-03/12:42 PM |
Ahhhh, that inventiveness all the way from -
I wish you the best of luck in the future-my wish is the only hope you've got!
Ahahahahaha. Quite.
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| Re: a comment on Soldiers by Bobjim |
10-Feb-03/12:39 PM |
You don't actually know the person you're talking to there!
Wonderful work, BJ, just wonderful!
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| Re: a comment on nightly by <~> |
10-Feb-03/12:37 PM |
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For what reasons, exactly is the bed shaking? Be more explicit in your works, make me, the reader, see what you are describing and...oh, sorry-that's a comment! (Heh ehhheehh...ahem)
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| Re: Star Bright by x311 |
5-Feb-03/12:45 PM |
I quite like this...it's not so depressing, but yeah, it's cool. I don't think that you'll get a good vote from poetandknowit, somehow.
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| Re: Mississipi Murder by scitz |
5-Feb-03/12:43 PM |
Nice.
A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
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| Re: immaculate perception by w~* ATHENA *~w |
5-Feb-03/12:40 PM |
Do you listen to Black Sabbath, Athena?
"In the daylight/runs darkness/on the verge of night a fear is born/sweeter than the dream" etc. Good song
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| Re: Grampa's Proverb by OneFingerAnswer |
5-Feb-03/12:34 PM |
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Nice proverb aside from the syllables.
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