| Re: a comment on The Ode that never was by Shardik |
25-Jan-03/9:04 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The Ode that never was by Shardik |
25-Jan-03/9:04 AM |
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Good stuff. Worth a nine now.
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| Re: Abused by scitz |
25-Jan-03/9:00 AM |
I think that the end should be different, stronger somehow. The last two lines don't really do the poem justice-otherwise I like this one too. 9
PS 'Masquerades an awful truth' is brilliant!
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| Re: a comment on Why my cock attracts idiots by horus8 |
25-Jan-03/8:53 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Starving at Tiffany's by horus8 |
25-Jan-03/8:51 AM |
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| Re: The Ode that never was by Shardik |
23-Jan-03/11:37 AM |
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Oh, but please change "would of" to "would have". Please.
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| Re: The Ode that never was by Shardik |
23-Jan-03/11:36 AM |
Oh...I really wanted to be sarcatic and rename it the Ode that never should have been...but it's actually quite funny.
Maybe next time. I'll go and read Blade's work to see real crap. Or not.
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| Re: a comment on Stars of the sky by GTK |
23-Jan-03/11:33 AM |
That was the BEST, absolute BEST exploration of constructive criticism I've ever seen!!!!
Oh wait...actually it's sarcasm.
Quite.
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| Re: 9/11 tribute by Caducus |
23-Jan-03/11:23 AM |
I really love this.
"That image of love will never sleep". Magic
I think I agree with Tintagiles about the Osama's beard bit, however I like the use of angels, also the 'slaughter' maximises the effect of that part (I know I sound vague here, never mind).
If you can find a way to replace the old beard this will be worth a ten on my behalf, till then you may have nine.
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| Re: The last day of an old year by poetandknowit |
23-Jan-03/11:18 AM |
An enjoyable read (although it was quite difficult to concentrate-must not listen to Crash Test Dummies while reading poetry!).
Yes, anyway-this is good, Mr. poetandknowit. I especially like the last bit of the second stanza very much. It's something slightly different to normal.
Perhaps now that I've acknowledged you're a good writer you'll feel more inclined to give me some help? :)
It would be greatly appreciated.
Regardless, I think I'll give this a nine.
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| Re: a comment on The Queen Mums Teeth by scitz |
22-Jan-03/1:18 PM |
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Hey, have you seen "Thumb Wars"? apparantley it's hilarious...speak to Yardbird!
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| Re: The Queen Mums Teeth by scitz |
22-Jan-03/1:17 PM |
Oh dear, scitz, you crack me up yet again...9!
And yes, ewoks do kick ass (if they can reach, that is!)
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| Re: Sex with a hairy brazilian by scitz |
22-Jan-03/1:15 PM |
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Good work, scitz, good work!
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| Re: a comment on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird |
21-Jan-03/6:36 AM |
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You nasty man, you should be ashamed of yourself...where would the poor tree fit? So mean, you are, and stingy too. hmph.
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| Re: a comment on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird |
21-Jan-03/5:11 AM |
*shoosh*
Don't let the secret out...dude!
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| Re: a comment on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird |
21-Jan-03/5:08 AM |
Not at all-everyone knows that trees have no bones. Silly.
Ask Bobjim next time!
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| Re: Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird |
21-Jan-03/5:07 AM |
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Marvellous...just marvellous.
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| Re: Liberty bells & Disney Land by horus8 |
21-Jan-03/1:37 AM |
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| Re: Alms for the Digger by Wulf |
21-Jan-03/1:33 AM |
First verse doesn't seem to fit with the feel of the rest of this one. Take it out and turn it into a new poem 'cause it's great (well I really like it!).
I'm not sure what to vote this, I'll have another read and think about it.
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| Re: Surreal by wordontheverge |
21-Jan-03/1:29 AM |
Like the end! Nice work, perhaps you could do another version of this and bring out the surreality (just for lil old me!) because I'd love to see more images-check out my 'Am I Still Here' if you want.
Yes anyway, a good poem here's a nine.
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