| Re: all is yet to come (version 2) by brazen |
6-May-03/11:15 AM |
Quite angry, full of feeling
One criticism : little to anchor the poem to something concrete (pretty rich coming from me!)
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| Re: You wash up, I forget. by Bachus |
6-May-03/11:20 AM |
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Confessional as always (if not of you of a character you created) but sharp enough to withstand it
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| Re: Insomniac by GekoHawaii |
6-May-03/11:22 AM |
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This is a bit creepy, almost like a depressing nursery rhyme
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6-May-03/11:24 AM |
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9-May-03/10:37 AM |
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ok not much in the way of originality, but well put together and well communicated
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9-May-03/10:39 AM |
What is it about gayness on here?
and bestiality as well
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| Re: all is yet to come (version 2) by brazen |
9-May-03/10:43 AM |
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I think three is a bit harsh, this has some good parts, I like the little entries of folklore
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| Re: Totem Pole by horus8 |
9-May-03/10:51 AM |
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Yes bob dylas an influence to me, like the stuff about reasons to live/ earthquake shelters/ pipelines
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| Re: This makes no sense by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
9-May-03/10:55 AM |
Like the second verse, quite clever.
and perceptive too
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9-May-03/11:01 AM |
Yes i enjoyed that
sweet, good flow
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9-May-03/11:01 AM |
Yes i enjoyed that
sweet, good flow
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| Re: I must be out of my mind by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
10-May-03/10:05 AM |
this is ok
gently amusing without recourse to the usual 'funny' issues written about on here
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| Re: long time no write by New Life Drug |
10-May-03/10:08 AM |
possibly needs to be shorter
I feel like i've been commandeered to listen to someone tell me their broken heart story when i want to watch the football
A few cute little references though, i'm sure if i read again i'll find a few more
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10-May-03/10:10 AM |
sums up the sorites paradox well
better than some text book blather
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| Re: Be Not Afraid Of Dying. by Mr Pig |
12-May-03/10:21 AM |
yes I like the tone of the haiku, seems to work with the sentiment.
Also its reasoning is very succinct
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| Re: I hope not by colndodg |
16-May-03/10:14 AM |
Yes, interesting question
funny cute
but the last four lines a little too cute
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16-May-03/10:16 AM |
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Sorry, but I find this a bit corny
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| Re: John Denver's hang-glider by horus8 |
16-May-03/10:21 AM |
Such a diverse use of language,
Most poems on here are so prosaic
this is more psychadaelic and exciting
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| Re: Typical Day by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
16-May-03/10:22 AM |
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my favourite of yours so far, a lot to interest
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| Re: Darkness ( A tribute to the poem FOOTPRINTS) by Mr Pig |
17-May-03/1:19 PM |
some nice turns of phrase 'solace of my echoes'
and half rhymes like abyss and peace
But I think it is quite prose like in parts and perhaps needs tightening a bit
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