Re: 3am and six cups of coffee gets you nowhere by Blindproject217	27-Apr-03/4:59 AM
the changing lines of thought work well with the flowing nature of this poem
Re: Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig	27-Apr-03/5:01 AM
Interesting, you seem to have changed the tone of the poem wildly by changing one word very charming
Re: PLAYMOBIL by Garrett S Sexton	27-Apr-03/5:03 AM
this is good One of your own technical structures?
Re: The Bored Housewife by Caducus	29-Apr-03/10:27 AM
I don't want to take sides here, But it read well very fluent
Re: Dumb Ideas by thepinkbunnyofdoom	29-Apr-03/10:29 AM
the loud rhymes and wreckless use of words give this a spirit of humor and exasperation
Re: The Captain Plecostumus Rap by INTRANSIT	30-Apr-03/11:07 AM
Will Smith right? Remember me when you are president
Re: Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos	30-Apr-03/11:09 AM
Like this, worthy of haiku
Re: Pour vous en seul by e1ementfire	30-Apr-03/11:11 AM
Good this, a poem using the most basic words arranged (so basic even I can translate it)
Re: Sir John Betjeman is dead Nicholas. by Bachus	2-May-03/10:52 AM
Rhyming myfanwy with passage, betjemen would have been proud
Re: Too Long by Luv2write	2-May-03/10:56 AM
not quite enough creative bites here, but the use of contrast is good
Re: Baron Von Paranoia's lurid chap book by <{Baba^Yaga}>	2-May-03/10:58 AM
mad as a jimeney cricket and interesting language
Re: he was the one i had written about before i met him 2 by rockinindividual	2-May-03/11:01 AM
flows well, bit like a flashbulb memory but needs elaborating a bit I think with some insight
Re: Manhattan by night by bondjedi	2-May-03/11:04 AM
Some nice comments perhaps more smart than insightful
Re: Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger	2-May-03/2:35 PM
yes, well redrafted very tight
regarding some deleted poem...	2-May-03/2:37 PM
Yes I can feel the music to this, although the happy ending is perhaps not needed or warranted
Re: When We Parted by anitawit	3-May-03/10:07 AM
Sweet and well put together
regarding some deleted poem...	3-May-03/10:12 AM
this is supposed to be ironic right?
Re: we're insane by nolan	4-May-03/6:43 AM
ah the old I'm the only sane one concept I like how it speeds up at the end, but perhaps in need of a few more ideas
Re: Hunting God by Shardik	4-May-03/6:48 AM
I am always impressed by vilanelles, like the bit about cant shoot dope and a busy social bee
Re: Lifestyles of the ripe and glamourless by horus8	6-May-03/11:12 AM
Pretty mental, I like the ending very beatish The use of tits, niggers, aids is perhaps a bit evocative by numbers though