on Baron Von Paranoia's lurid chap book by <{Baba^Yaga}>
2 May 2003, 10:58 AM
mad as a jimeney cricket and interesting language
on Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos
30 Apr 2003, 11:09 AM
Like this, worthy of haiku
on Lifestyles of the ripe and glamourless by horus8
6 May 2003, 11:12 AM
Pretty mental, I like the ending very beatish
The use of tits, niggers, aids is perhaps a bit evocative by numbers though
The use of tits, niggers, aids is perhaps a bit evocative by numbers though
on When We Parted by anitawit
3 May 2003, 10:07 AM
Sweet and well put together
on some deleted poem
3 May 2003, 10:12 AM
this is supposed to be ironic right?
on Manhattan by night by bondjedi
2 May 2003, 11:04 AM
Some nice comments
perhaps more smart than insightful
perhaps more smart than insightful
on Hunting God by Shardik
4 May 2003, 6:48 AM
I am always impressed by vilanelles, like the bit about cant shoot dope and a busy social bee
on Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger
2 May 2003, 2:35 PM
yes, well redrafted
very tight
very tight
on some deleted poem
2 May 2003, 2:37 PM
Yes I can feel the music to this, although the happy ending is perhaps not needed or warranted
on he was the one i had written about before i met him 2 by rockinindividual
2 May 2003, 11:01 AM
flows well,
bit like a flashbulb memory but needs elaborating a bit I think with some insight
bit like a flashbulb memory but needs elaborating a bit I think with some insight
on Pour vous en seul by e1ementfire
30 Apr 2003, 11:11 AM
Good this, a poem using the most basic words arranged
(so basic even I can translate it)
(so basic even I can translate it)
on The Bored Housewife by Caducus
29 Apr 2003, 10:27 AM
I don't want to take sides here, But it read well very fluent
on Dumb Ideas by thepinkbunnyofdoom
29 Apr 2003, 10:29 AM
the loud rhymes and wreckless use of words give this a spirit of humor and exasperation
on 3am and six cups of coffee gets you nowhere by Blindproject217
27 Apr 2003, 4:59 AM
the changing lines of thought work well with the flowing nature of this poem
on Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig
27 Apr 2003, 5:01 AM
Interesting, you seem to have changed the tone of the poem wildly by changing one word
very charming
very charming
on PLAYMOBIL by Garrett S Sexton
27 Apr 2003, 5:03 AM
this is good
One of your own technical structures?
One of your own technical structures?
on The Captain Plecostumus Rap by INTRANSIT
30 Apr 2003, 11:07 AM
Will Smith right?
Remember me when you are president
Remember me when you are president
on we're insane by nolan
4 May 2003, 6:43 AM
ah the old I'm the only sane one concept
I like how it speeds up at the end, but perhaps in need of a few more ideas
I like how it speeds up at the end, but perhaps in need of a few more ideas
on Sir John Betjeman is dead Nicholas. by Bachus
2 May 2003, 10:52 AM
Rhyming myfanwy with passage, betjemen would have been proud