| Re: Lost and found by INTRANSIT |
16-Apr-03/11:43 AM |
Cute, short and too the point
I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight
I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this
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| Re: visual erotic by princesszoe |
16-Apr-03/11:46 AM |
nice original use of language
but at times a bit distant
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19-Apr-03/10:06 AM |
I wouldn't call this a poem.
But it is fairly interesting
You always stand out
You are modern art
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| Re: Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger |
19-Apr-03/10:07 AM |
Yes I like the rhythm and the sudden stops in it
Quite creative
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19-Apr-03/10:10 AM |
very well put together
I understand it as a poem
Before I even think about the meaning
Have an 8
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| Re: Truth in Lies by BleedingRose |
22-Apr-03/10:49 AM |
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not sure i'm convinced, but quite clever nevertheless
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22-Apr-03/10:52 AM |
Seemed to take a dramatic turn near the end
Thats where I liked it best
Nice full picture built up
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| Re: For my wife by INTRANSIT |
22-Apr-03/10:55 AM |
Lead in with gentle cliches
then bang ' a placid pool' really makes this short poem
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| Re: spring by <~> |
23-Apr-03/10:15 AM |
I don't quite get its meaning,
still i don't care much for meaning
words are only an analog
this could mean a million things
all good
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23-Apr-03/10:18 AM |
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enjoyable use of language but the upbeat rhyme a bit at odds with the sentiment perhaps?
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| Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT |
23-Apr-03/10:20 AM |
good rhyming
I think this is key to this kind of writing
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25-Apr-03/11:40 AM |
you call yourself a self obsessed loser
With a sense of humour?
This is ok not as good as the first one though
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| Re: Lovers Game by scitz |
25-Apr-03/11:43 AM |
This is awful hard work to read
Some nice images, some surreal images plenty of creative energy
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| Re: Joshua by Bachus |
25-Apr-03/11:46 AM |
very good
The sentiment matches the sound of the poem well,
flows like a lucid confession
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25-Apr-03/11:50 AM |
Yes the best ive read of yours so far
mature style, a few gentle rhymes to surprise
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| Re: Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger |
26-Apr-03/10:09 AM |
very vividly told
very fairytale like, gentle
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| Re: Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig |
26-Apr-03/10:12 AM |
yes I would change lacerated too, it just seems out of place.
Overall though very delicate and in the spirit of haiku(if not quite the syllable count)
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| Re: Jared Leto & Apocalyptic poetry. by Shardik |
26-Apr-03/10:15 AM |
reads more like an opinion than a poem
structure is good though
and logic is clear, well logic is always clear
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26-Apr-03/10:17 AM |
quite good this
I guess it is whats known as impressionist
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| Re: I Speak of Expanses by anitawit |
26-Apr-03/10:19 AM |
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