on Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig
26 Apr 2003, 10:12 AM
yes I would change lacerated too, it just seems out of place.
Overall though very delicate and in the spirit of haiku(if not quite the syllable count)
Overall though very delicate and in the spirit of haiku(if not quite the syllable count)
on Jared Leto & Apocalyptic poetry. by Shardik
26 Apr 2003, 10:15 AM
reads more like an opinion than a poem
structure is good though
and logic is clear, well logic is always clear
structure is good though
and logic is clear, well logic is always clear
on Truth in Lies by BleedingRose
22 Apr 2003, 10:49 AM
not sure i'm convinced, but quite clever nevertheless
on For my wife by INTRANSIT
22 Apr 2003, 10:55 AM
Lead in with gentle cliches
then bang ' a placid pool' really makes this short poem
then bang ' a placid pool' really makes this short poem
on some deleted poem
26 Apr 2003, 10:17 AM
quite good this
I guess it is whats known as impressionist
I guess it is whats known as impressionist
on some deleted poem
25 Apr 2003, 11:40 AM
you call yourself a self obsessed loser
With a sense of humour?
This is ok not as good as the first one though
With a sense of humour?
This is ok not as good as the first one though
on Lovers Game by scitz
25 Apr 2003, 11:43 AM
This is awful hard work to read
Some nice images, some surreal images plenty of creative energy
Some nice images, some surreal images plenty of creative energy
on some deleted poem
25 Apr 2003, 11:50 AM
Yes the best ive read of yours so far
mature style, a few gentle rhymes to surprise
mature style, a few gentle rhymes to surprise
on Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT
23 Apr 2003, 10:20 AM
good rhyming
I think this is key to this kind of writing
I think this is key to this kind of writing
on some deleted poem
23 Apr 2003, 10:18 AM
enjoyable use of language but the upbeat rhyme a bit at odds with the sentiment perhaps?
on some deleted poem
22 Apr 2003, 10:52 AM
Seemed to take a dramatic turn near the end
Thats where I liked it best
Nice full picture built up
Thats where I liked it best
Nice full picture built up
on some deleted poem
19 Apr 2003, 10:06 AM
I wouldn't call this a poem.
But it is fairly interesting
You always stand out
You are modern art
But it is fairly interesting
You always stand out
You are modern art
on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger
19 Apr 2003, 10:07 AM
Yes I like the rhythm and the sudden stops in it
Quite creative
Quite creative
on some deleted poem
19 Apr 2003, 10:10 AM
very well put together
I understand it as a poem
Before I even think about the meaning
Have an 8
I understand it as a poem
Before I even think about the meaning
Have an 8
on Lost and found by INTRANSIT
16 Apr 2003, 11:43 AM
Cute, short and too the point
I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight
I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this
I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight
I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this
on visual erotic by princesszoe
16 Apr 2003, 11:46 AM
nice original use of language
but at times a bit distant
but at times a bit distant
on I Speak of Expanses by anitawit
26 Apr 2003, 10:19 AM
nice use of repetition
very fairytale like, gentle