on Surreal... by Yardbird
16 Jan 2003, 9:25 PM
Wow, What are you?
on American Poem by ASTRO-GLIDE
16 Jan 2003, 9:24 PM
i like he idea, but remember "Pride before fall"
on Women Fight Dirty by scitz
16 Jan 2003, 9:22 PM
Point well made, only You don't have a clue of what you are talking about
replying on Thorns of Grace by smlink84
16 Jan 2003, 7:09 AM
Thank You
on Cat by Topaz Servias
13 Jan 2003, 8:39 PM
You have to tell me about this
on Fuck the system by which we live by Lucifer
13 Jan 2003, 8:35 PM
What a sorry piece of crap. Take care.
replying on Fuck the system by which we live by Lucifer
13 Jan 2003, 8:35 PM
What The hell is all this about, TOPAZ?
on Random thoughts poem-do not try to find a meaning for there are too many. by lunar
13 Jan 2003, 8:30 PM
It's good, but get the emotions organized and not so vague. 7
on The shirt I wore to dinner. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
13 Jan 2003, 8:28 PM
WOW. Have a nice day. 0
replying on P.L. I wrote this in seven minutes at 1:36am. But I hope You can get the gist by smlink84
12 Jan 2003, 7:49 PM
What's so bad about rhyming Blame name and shame? They are part of the poem and they have a distinct meaning. Like "name", Symbolic for "me".
replying on P.L. I wrote this in seven minutes at 1:36am. But I hope You can get the gist by smlink84
12 Jan 2003, 7:44 PM
"crush my dreams", your an idiot.
on When I wake... by Topaz Servias
6 Jan 2003, 7:54 PM
Intersting, I wonder whom you are talking about. man-with-pants
on Track.... by Topaz Servias
6 Jan 2003, 7:52 PM
I have seen the murky line
On which your soul will twine
Sandwhich is what you wanted right?
Dirty room like the twilight.
On which your soul will twine
Sandwhich is what you wanted right?
Dirty room like the twilight.
on Maria by Nicholas Monson
28 Dec 2002, 7:09 PM
Very NIce, "Whom is the correct grammar", don't worry. I also feel that" Then I first espied her.
She had beauty to excess!
A laugh to shiver spines -
A Galician princess.
What mystic Yorkshire root
Was stirred in quiemada?
What supernatural spice
Was robbed from heaven's larder?"
is very descriptive in imagery.
She had beauty to excess!
A laugh to shiver spines -
A Galician princess.
What mystic Yorkshire root
Was stirred in quiemada?
What supernatural spice
Was robbed from heaven's larder?"
is very descriptive in imagery.
on The canary's last song by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Dec 2002, 6:47 PM
"melody in a cage", I like the metaphor. Do You like Robert Frost?
replying on Doped Up Dr. Seuss by smlink84
25 Dec 2002, 7:13 PM
Seem's like it right? I had fun writing this.
on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus
25 Dec 2002, 6:57 PM
I liked the gist of this poem, but the meataphors you decided to use hold no particular meaning in literature or even logically. " Crocodiles drown in synchronized sorrow," I really thought of this particualr verse as, well stupid. Don't be offeneded, as I said like the theme behind this poem and thought it better than many of the others I have read. I'm only trying to help you out. It would be alot better if you added symbolism that made sense. for instance, a candle is usally related to life, a hawk is reffered to as the soul.
on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
22 Nov 2002, 7:52 PM
I like it.
on Sod this! This poem can't rhyme for toffee... by Yardbird
22 Nov 2002, 7:48 PM
Funny.