replying on rainday by Bill Z Bub
16 Jul 2003, 9:39 AM
Stranger than "cloudbells" or "galoshed"? :)
replying on unsent by Bill Z Bub
15 Jul 2003, 5:44 PM
Hmm. Hoom. Hum. "will slowly/ yield/again."?
"can slowly/ yield/ again"
"must slowly/ yield/ again"
"yields/ again" ?
AAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAa.
Rewriting and rewriting and reswdfitlnvinldv......
...I need a glass of water.
"can slowly/ yield/ again"
"must slowly/ yield/ again"
"yields/ again" ?
AAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAa.
Rewriting and rewriting and reswdfitlnvinldv......
...I need a glass of water.
replying on thought & memory by Bill Z Bub
15 Jul 2003, 5:40 PM
Thank you. How about "unseen"?
replying on joyriding by Bill Z Bub
15 Jul 2003, 5:18 PM
Who is tint?
replying on unsent by Bill Z Bub
13 Jul 2003, 8:34 PM
Well, I know it isn't, now. And thanks.
replying on The Umpteenth Home by EAger to Offend
13 Jul 2003, 8:29 PM
I want to assure you I meant that in a completely humble, non-arrogant way. Take every comment I make with a grain of salt, because I am highly uneducated.
My post-secondary education consisted of Art school. As for the English language and grammar, and literature and poetic devices and meter and such, I am mostly self taught.
Oops, I just blew my cover! The gig is up! You'll never take me alive, copper! Nyaaah!
My post-secondary education consisted of Art school. As for the English language and grammar, and literature and poetic devices and meter and such, I am mostly self taught.
Oops, I just blew my cover! The gig is up! You'll never take me alive, copper! Nyaaah!
on The Umpteenth Home by EAger to Offend
13 Jul 2003, 6:09 PM
The only critique I have for your writing is the dearth of concrete imagery. Something to bite into, the juice streaming out in molten arcs.
on A Brand New Eye by EAger to Offend
13 Jul 2003, 5:53 PM
slightly abstract, but the poets will get it
on Optimism, pessimism and my quarter theory by INTRANSIT
13 Jul 2003, 5:30 PM
This one's worth a quarter for certain. And I'm a cheap bastard. What the hell, here's a ten.
replying on The obsessive compulsive sloth was a junkie by <{Baba^Yaga}>
8 Jul 2003, 10:37 PM
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replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
5 Jul 2003, 6:55 PM
Okay...
NFG BOUGHT IT!
SNAP!
(hm, slathered names...)
I lave the world
in slathered leather feathers.
NFG BOUGHT IT!
SNAP!
(hm, slathered names...)
I lave the world
in slathered leather feathers.
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
5 Jul 2003, 6:42 PM
it got et?
replying on I am talented & good looking damnit! by <{Baba^Yaga}>
5 Jul 2003, 5:58 PM
Great stuff, man. That's about the extent of my music criticism abilities.
I played bass guitar in a band in high school. The band had one gig, then broke up. They all wanted to play crappy cover tunes.
Thanks for the movie recommendations. Doubt my local video store carries them, but ya never know.
So, hows "sharkmouth" coming?
Heh.
I played bass guitar in a band in high school. The band had one gig, then broke up. They all wanted to play crappy cover tunes.
Thanks for the movie recommendations. Doubt my local video store carries them, but ya never know.
So, hows "sharkmouth" coming?
Heh.
replying on missing time by Bill Z Bub
5 Jul 2003, 5:51 AM
Thanks for the critique. I've revised this piece several times since this draft, but since it's in the top twenty, I don't want to wipe out all the votes.
~William Zanzibar Bubbington, Jr.
~William Zanzibar Bubbington, Jr.
on Untitled #13 by david
4 Jul 2003, 7:21 PM
the story of an altarboy who wore white too long. Then one day he got gangrene and his toes rotted off, each little piggy one by one falling and collected in a basket that he keeps in the back of a cupboard. Just don't let the earwigs in. They have a knack for pinching what little memory is left.
Hmm, I see you've been around a while. But I don't think I've read any poems of yours before today. Oh here's a Ten --> 10.
Hmm, I see you've been around a while. But I don't think I've read any poems of yours before today. Oh here's a Ten --> 10.
on I am talented & good looking damnit! by <{Baba^Yaga}>
4 Jul 2003, 7:13 PM
I saw an amazing movie last night.: "Frida". Ah, Salma baby, I don't know wether to salute or cry. Or both.
Hey do you ever stop writing? Didn't think so. Is okay if I tape this to my bathroom mirror and repeat it to myself every morning?
Hey do you ever stop writing? Didn't think so. Is okay if I tape this to my bathroom mirror and repeat it to myself every morning?
on touch of the grass by david
4 Jul 2003, 7:08 PM
Green teeth. Exquisite.
I raise my coffee cup to you, sir. Salut!
This is what happens when I'm away from this site for a month.
I raise my coffee cup to you, sir. Salut!
This is what happens when I'm away from this site for a month.
on Death on my arm by INTRANSIT
4 Jul 2003, 7:03 PM
nice minimalist piece ** I've been away far too long ** and anarchy has descended on rancid mustard wings **
also, I'm getting published ** hooray, I am semi-semi-professional **
also, I'm getting published ** hooray, I am semi-semi-professional **
replying on sharkmouth by Bill Z Bub
9 Jun 2003, 11:32 AM
That'd be awesome.