on One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined
14 Sep 2005, 12:49 PM
Excellent. The rhyme is unforced and content profound.
on Rapid Eye Movement by wilco
17 Sep 2005, 9:43 AM
I agree with Dan. "Nothing makes the night so lonely"
seems rather awkward. Perhaps, "Nothing mkes the dream alive" Just a thought and a ten by my reckoning.
seems rather awkward. Perhaps, "Nothing mkes the dream alive" Just a thought and a ten by my reckoning.
on Leaving Song by wilco
17 Sep 2005, 9:52 AM
I can relate. Short but oh so true.
on Out of a White Hole by ALChemy
20 Sep 2005, 11:03 AM
Really good writing. I write a fair amount on quantum physics as it is on the cutting edge of reality tho most people aren't familiar with the subject. You express yourself and your concepts quite well. Also, one of the few to put these concepts into poetic form, not an easy task when dealing with the abstract and esoteric. Keep it up. Oh yeah, a ten.
on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina
17 Sep 2005, 8:13 PM
A good narrative poem that tells a story. Tennessee is
a beautiful state and probably more laid back than most. This is indicated by your poem.
a beautiful state and probably more laid back than most. This is indicated by your poem.
on Night Shift by ALChemy
20 Sep 2005, 10:50 AM
Neat poem. Some great lines buy perhaps a bit wordy in some parts as Dovina mentioned. A solid nine.
on Nowhere Land by Caducus
21 Sep 2005, 9:08 AM
I am a bit confused by parts of this but overall, I found myself liking it. And it is up to the reader to interpret your meaning.
on some deleted poem
21 Sep 2005, 9:36 AM
Terrific. I had to re-read and it just got better. A ten.
on some deleted poem
2 Feb 2007, 10:18 AM
Sorry for the the tirade. Actually, there is some good stuff being written at poemranker but this is definitely not one of them.
on A Part of Me by Quarton
8 Feb 2007, 1:07 PM
Ranger, you are probably right but the whole Cartesian
mind-set seems to be fair game though rather abstract which makes for a difficult subject to write about.
Thanks for the read and comments.
mind-set seems to be fair game though rather abstract which makes for a difficult subject to write about.
Thanks for the read and comments.
on some deleted poem
27 Feb 2007, 10:56 AM
As Harry Carey would say, "holy cow." Or is that "Holy Ghost?" Not a pretty picture you paint.
on The Medium of Dunce by Ranger
6 Mar 2007, 12:30 PM
Damn, this is good! I like the rhyme scheme which is unforced and adds to the read and flow. How about a 10 plus.
on cold war by Dental Panic
6 Mar 2007, 1:44 PM
Interesting comment regarding the "conveyor belt." The warming of the earth causing the breakdown of these natural currents which, paradoxically, leads to an overall cooling event. Kind of damned if you do and damned if you don't. Regardless, we are in big trouble with little or no acknowledgement by our president and the multi-national corporations which are in control. Profit at any price and damn the coonsequences mentality. Go Gore! Oh, almost forgot. Great poem.
on Quantum Reality by Quarton
6 Mar 2007, 11:20 AM
Thanks for the comments. I love Vonnegut and the movie version of Slaughterhouse Five is one of my favorites. It is a "must see" in my opinion and is almost a cult movie as Billy Pilgrim becomes unstuck in time. I am curious. What is the other half? Also, your post was deleted and I am not sure why. Any suggestions as this has happened several times?
on Quantum Reality by Quarton
6 Mar 2007, 11:37 AM
Dovina--Yeah, it does wander but so does my mind. It also wonders in regard to science, cosmology and quantum mechanics. Rather esoteric stuff and I suspect even the theoretical physicists are unable to unerstand on an intellectual level. Ineffable is descriptive of this enigma. Regardless, we are all connected despite the illusion of separateness.
on some deleted poem
6 Mar 2007, 11:55 AM
Occam's razor is alive and well.
on Pedaling West by Dovina
13 Mar 2007, 1:22 PM
Good poem. It has a nice flow and the "ride" is one of life itself expressed through riding your bike. I really do like this and the message it contains.