poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Robert K Foster (141-160)

Comments byRobert K Foster, 141–160 back. Include replies

on Dolly was a damn fine lamb by <{Baba^Yaga}> 7 Mar 2003, 7:51 AM
I think she looks good for her age.
(actuially i like this poem)
on The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted by OneFingerAnswer 7 Mar 2003, 10:14 AM
this really dosn't say anything.
on some deleted poem 7 Mar 2003, 10:43 AM
could be stronger and more precise...
on Grampa's Proverb by OneFingerAnswer 7 Mar 2003, 7:41 AM
"a" rather than "his" perhaps?
on some deleted poem 7 Mar 2003, 7:47 AM
OK
on Over Wait by flatliner 21 May 2003, 10:34 AM
"too easy to drift". true. it's too hard to pay attention when something doesn't say anything at all, rambling ambiguity rambilng redundantly in nothingness but repetition. Yeehaa maw. chicken feet.
on some deleted poem 21 May 2003, 9:49 AM
I agree. the third is the best
on Paranoia by lastobelus 14 Mar 2003, 9:22 AM
reminded me of some of the DaDa poetry--I like the egg in the hair reference. You've captured paranoia here.
on Lately by lastobelus 14 Mar 2003, 9:16 AM
I believe that you could tie in the crumbling of crackers with the sand sifting.... just a thought. Other than that, I would suggest that you tighten tha language a little bit...Powerful images and overall well done. 8
on van Gogh's Irises by lastobelus 14 Mar 2003, 9:19 AM
2nd line (in parentheses) is redundant with the title.
also, I suggest cutting "Some kind of" to strengthen the image of forgotten flags--and then ask yourself if the last two lines are truly needed for the meaning of the poem...
a valiant effort...you have a good grasp on imagery and "fresh" language.
on Love spank by Shardik 7 Mar 2003, 10:13 AM
know? you mean "no", i am certain.
on who? by Crakyamuni 7 Mar 2003, 10:12 AM
hrmmmm... syllables, OK... content - iffy, not very funny, really kind of mediocre.
on Loud Taps by celiff 7 Mar 2003, 7:52 AM
how kindergarten like. I bet kids would love this--nice rhythm and simplicity... bad title, though.
on Aries, the God of war by Shardik 7 Mar 2003, 7:50 AM
Hoving?

No entry found for hoving.

4 suggestions found:

loving

moving

roving

homing

shoving?

you've masked the meaning too much, i think.
on some deleted poem 7 Mar 2003, 7:53 AM
martinis?
parhaps you've had a few because your meaning is muddled and now i'm befuddled.
on Harry Potter and the philosophers stone by ==Doylum 7 Mar 2003, 7:46 AM
I didn't read it--but it is not a haiku.
on The Stand... an off rip by horus8 7 Mar 2003, 7:46 AM
much shorter than the original book. They could've saved a lot of paper.
on Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig 7 Mar 2003, 7:45 AM
4
7
4

I see a pattern here - thematically and form wise.
I'm also curious as to how so many of yours keep coming up--it would explain how your numbers got so high.
on The unlucky Janitor haikus by Bachus 7 Mar 2003, 10:15 AM
different.
on No more tears, or trail by Bachus 7 Mar 2003, 10:16 AM
not as good as it could be. this format may be too limiting to what you are trying to say.