on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 11:36 AM
excellent. nicely done.
on some deleted poem
24 Feb 2003, 8:37 AM
a powerful blend of images. bravo.
on some deleted poem
7 Mar 2003, 7:37 AM
the fork is a cliche'. try soemthing else (but not a spoon) the rest is all right.
on some deleted poem
26 Feb 2003, 5:20 AM
I like it. I once knew a woman who wrote an entire essay about Fred Astaire's hands--how lovely they must've been and how nobody ever looked at them. this reminded me of that. I like the first few images in particular. 9
on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig
26 Feb 2003, 5:24 AM
I like it.
as for present conversation here, I will say nothing ten times.
there.
as for present conversation here, I will say nothing ten times.
there.
on "loveless life" by Jaketiger
24 Feb 2003, 12:25 PM
plagued by typos (such as "traped" and "tstay"), it makes it tough to read and detracts from any poetic quality. cut the redundancies and tighten up your language. try some images--similes, metaphors--fresh ones not "daggar of fate" trite stuff. push yourself. don't be afraid.
on A Lost Friend by Ray
24 Feb 2003, 12:28 PM
YAWN. bo-ring. theraputing wring is a nice thing to do, but too often folks think it is good for sharing. keep these to yourself. write about something new.
on A Lost Friend by Ray
24 Feb 2003, 2:38 PM
Don't be discouraged. Keep trying. We are all trying.
on (untitled) by Ray
24 Feb 2003, 2:41 PM
Hope it wasn't something I said. :)
Nice use of form, a bit heavy on the assonance--beware of sounding too sing-songy. 6.
Nice use of form, a bit heavy on the assonance--beware of sounding too sing-songy. 6.
on some deleted poem
24 Jan 2003, 7:46 AM
Odd. I can't think of anything else to say. just Odd. for that, you get a 9.
on Dear Mr. Poetry, could you hold my purse? <how does babbit do it> by horus8
21 Jan 2003, 7:36 AM
except for the shouting, i like this. I think the "!"s could go.
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 11:40 AM
veyr nice. been here for a while, still good!
on OK, I apologize - it's steaming shite and no mistake, but it was the best I could come up with on the spur of the moment. I'm off to slit my wrists now, since writer's block has sent me spiralling into the depths of the deepest depression in human history... by Yardbird
17 Jan 2003, 11:38 AM
I hope you don't hurt yourself. It isn't the right thing to do. I like this limerick lots and lots and I hope you stick around and write more.
on The Dark one's 2000th comment by <{Baba^Yaga}>
7 Mar 2003, 7:40 AM
I'm confused. thank you. confusion can be good sometimes.
on The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Mar 2003, 7:38 AM
First haiku- 8.5
second - 4.5
average- 6.
second - 4.5
average- 6.
on Revelation ( 666 ) by Mr Pig
7 Mar 2003, 7:36 AM
5
5
4
what gives?
5
4
what gives?
7
6
nice thought, though.