on Track.... by Topaz Servias
15 Jan 2003, 9:33 AM
nice, but not limericky.
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 11:35 AM
you've misclassified this as a limerick.
on late night activities by sooz
17 Jan 2003, 11:31 AM
again, line lengths disrupt what the rhythm should be.
on some deleted poem
15 Jan 2003, 9:29 AM
too much time on your hands, apparently. Not very limericky.
on some deleted poem
2 Jan 2003, 7:37 AM
any poem that starts out "oh baby" is hard to take seriously.
on anonymous guy by sooz
17 Jan 2003, 11:34 AM
as i knotted his noose
(simply becasue he couldn't scream and dangle) otherwise, I like this! a valiant job. 9.
(simply becasue he couldn't scream and dangle) otherwise, I like this! a valiant job. 9.
on The blue light special. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
15 Jan 2003, 9:42 AM
last line should rhyme with the first two.
on some deleted poem
15 Jan 2003, 9:31 AM
weak
on Perversions 3: Payback by razorgrin
17 Jan 2003, 11:30 AM
get rid of "who" in the first one,
and th elast one, while the premise is good, doesn't seem to flow as well as the others. overall, an 8
and th elast one, while the premise is good, doesn't seem to flow as well as the others. overall, an 8
on gerbil by betty swallox
17 Jan 2003, 11:33 AM
cute.
on Mommy, why does -=DarkAngel=- use 'an' so much? by <{Baba^Yaga}>
15 Jan 2003, 9:36 AM
I suppose its all in good fun. I was a smidge distracted by the lack of line break separating the rhymes in the 3rd line of each limerick.
on Cat by Topaz Servias
15 Jan 2003, 9:38 AM
Limericks use the distinctive rhyming scheme of a-a-b-b-a, where the first two lines set the scene, the third and fourth lines quickly twist things about, and the fifth line hammers the conclusion. (first, second, and fifth lines are trimeter, third and fourth are dimeter).
this is from the help screen, not my original writing.
Limericks focus on the absurd or the silly when they're not downright naughty.
this is from the help screen, not my original writing.
Limericks focus on the absurd or the silly when they're not downright naughty.
on AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
15 Jan 2003, 9:43 AM
tremendously brave and reverent (sorry)...downright boy scouty, i must say!
on A Short Letter by Ranger
15 Jan 2003, 9:45 AM
nit witty, but succinct. bravo.
on Frustration by DewDrop
7 Jan 2003, 8:56 AM
I like this a lot, but I think you may have misclassified it as a limerick.
on perversions 2: the revenge by razorgrin
15 Jan 2003, 9:40 AM
very nicely done. bravo and two shakes.
on Bobjim, Jimbob by Spider-Man
15 Jan 2003, 9:41 AM
knob?
Also, I'm seeing a pattern here of people making fun of one another. I hope its all in good fun.
Also, I'm seeing a pattern here of people making fun of one another. I hope its all in good fun.
on Jockey by betty swallox
15 Jan 2003, 9:38 AM
a bit wordy--it muddles up the pace.
on Bloodsucker by hobojo
17 Jan 2003, 10:49 AM
rhyme scheme, OK
but the rhythm is amiss.
a fine poem, but not really limericky.
but the rhythm is amiss.
a fine poem, but not really limericky.