poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Robert K Foster (81-100) and replies

Comments byRobert K Foster, 81–100 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on moist towelettes by chinstrap 10 Jun 2003, 9:28 AM
cute
on i'm the jesse james of the seven-eleven chain by Bachus 10 Jun 2003, 9:24 AM
yoohoo rocks. gotta love chocolate water.
on European Pentameter by bondjedi 10 Jun 2003, 9:22 AM
high school?
on Emotionless by Roisin 10 Jun 2003, 9:18 AM
nice. very nice.
on Nelly's loving letter....to a dear lover Giles by dantron 10 Jun 2003, 9:17 AM
maybe instead of "popers" you should say "popery" - look it up.
oh- and as for this being a haiku, it isn't. as far as it being a good poem, it's not that, either.
on alone in winter by ~incarnate~ 10 Jun 2003, 9:12 AM
chilling.
on Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe 10 Jun 2003, 9:07 AM
mekka lekka hi mekka heiny ho.
on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm 9 Jun 2003, 12:27 PM
his knobby hands riding your hips?

I'm confused by this image,

like a coin operated horse at the supermarket?
that implies a climbing on, straddling motion, which confuses me, wouldn't the woman be straddling? Not the man's hands...
I'm confused.

I like the poem, but I am confused.
replying on Anouk by daniella 2 Jun 2003, 5:11 AM
I've witnessed a few births, and I don't ever remember anything bubbling up. My point is that the poemmmakes it sound like a tremendous fart happened, similar to a big bubble rising in hot mud. BLOOP!
Here's my thinking about your response. You owe reality nothing. just becasue it is the best way to state your perspective of exactly what happened doesn't make it good poetry. I was giving you a reader's response to your poem--and I beleive that if you need to have something "bubble up" there must be a better way of stating it.
on Stuck in the Past... by loneshadow29 29 May 2003, 10:47 AM
zero.
on The Autopsy (as shown on Channel Four) by Nicholas Jones 29 May 2003, 10:43 AM
troubling.
on While cleaning the aviary by Jeremi B. Handrinos 29 May 2003, 10:42 AM
is it aviary? or avery? I'll have to look that up.
great poem!
on Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones 29 May 2003, 10:40 AM
oo ee oo aa aa bing bang walla walla ding dang.
on Walter Cronkite by UnityMitford 29 May 2003, 10:39 AM
i like a good mlt. mutton lettuce and tomato sandwich...
on the love by sooz 29 May 2003, 10:37 AM
awww.. pitter patter. like little feet. AAAAH!
on Shut the fuck up and fix me a Scoobie snack. by Bachus 29 May 2003, 10:35 AM
overused the """"""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""marks. cute concept!
on Suicide by Alyssa91 29 May 2003, 10:33 AM
buried.
careful with the spelling...
If you are thinking of suicide, don't do it. I hope that you are mature enough to know that life will get better--pain dulls with time.

as for the poem, some of the rhymes seemed forced, interrupting the flow.
on Knife by Alyssa91 29 May 2003, 10:30 AM
what is a medician?
Otherwise I liked it. somewhat sexual, somewhat angst-ridden.
on Anouk by daniella 29 May 2003, 10:27 AM
I think this is lovely, save the "bubble rising at birth" being a troubling image of some odd body function. It takes the reader in the wrong direction early on.
on Happy Cancer! by Agemo-Z 23 May 2003, 11:29 AM
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