on The Weaver's Curse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
11 Sep 2002, 1:28 PM
Is it supposed to be "loon?" Oh yeah it is loom cos it's titled the weaver's curse. Well I don't get it.
on Cat and Door by gothwalk
11 Sep 2002, 1:26 PM
lol
on Fallen Leaves From a Tree by kristenk69lover
11 Sep 2002, 1:26 PM
You have a nice thing going but like some other commenter said you tend to give your point away so the poem kinda looses it's essence. Try writing(which you are doing a great job of) and then reading through to see which lines you can omit. Poetry(my definition) is the medium through which a person(poet) describes feelings without being too definitive. Good luck. :-)
on Inner Peace by god
11 Sep 2002, 1:17 PM
Who made you "god"?
on Dick Cheney, Man of Tomorrow by bondjedi
11 Sep 2002, 1:14 PM
LOL LOL LOL!
on Loneliness by Cha no Onna
11 Sep 2002, 1:12 PM
Hmmm...
on What is Black by ivoryangie1
11 Sep 2002, 1:12 PM
add 'nd' to the 'a' between big and strong. Keep being proud.
on The MV-perience by Modulo
11 Sep 2002, 1:10 PM
Huh?(contemplates...)
on At my grandmother's aging sight by vulcan
10 Sep 2002, 9:02 AM
I don't exactly get the last 3 lines of S5, but otherwise this is very good. You seem to be expressing a slight fear of growing old.
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
10 Sep 2002, 8:55 AM
Bachus you naughty boy! The last stanza gives me the impression that sunshine meant nothing to you.
on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
10 Sep 2002, 8:53 AM
"canoe" is correct.
on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
10 Sep 2002, 8:52 AM
I like your imagery Christof. Like Limness I would say you should put a full stop at the end of Stanza3 but then again, it's your work and your message.
on A Musical Dream by vulcan
6 Sep 2002, 8:09 AM
nice one vulcan.;-)
on Reflected, Dreamed by Frass
3 Sep 2002, 2:35 PM
Frass, I like it. :-)
on I Hate You by mytenderrage
3 Sep 2002, 9:23 AM
Jeez guys all she said was "I hate you". I gave this poem an 8 cuz although it seems very naive and naivete is blasted horridly on this site, everyone at some points in their lives experience the feeling. I guess it seems naive because the poem though expressing hate doesn't sound forceful. good luck.