on Friends by anitawit
14 Apr 2003, 12:50 PM
A few typos(i didn't take off for them but they are there). Other than that nothing that really makes it stand out, but its still good. -7-
on You by adrenalize
14 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
well said -7-
on Flash of Light by Todd
14 Apr 2003, 12:45 PM
To best see the light one must stand in shadow
on NUDIST FLEET by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:50 PM
Huh?
on Sweet Dreams by d35
18 Apr 2003, 1:03 PM
This tale of suicide could use a little work. Connect the events. -7-
on The Smarts aint Stupids by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:07 PM
My first reaction :WTF:
My second reaction :what the bloody fuck:
My third reaction :what a fuck:
My fourth reaction :awe fuck If I'm this confused give it a -10- and try and sort it out later:
My second reaction :what the bloody fuck:
My third reaction :what a fuck:
My fourth reaction :awe fuck If I'm this confused give it a -10- and try and sort it out later:
on Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins
12 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
Take me with you.
on In Debt by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:39 PM
Just strange.
on some deleted poem
22 Apr 2003, 7:34 PM
I feel guilty now for every blowjob I have ever recieved.
on some deleted poem
22 Apr 2003, 7:26 PM
A poem(much as I hate to start this arguement again) is a group of words artfully aranged together to convey an Idea. At least thats the best I can figure it. By the way this is well done. -10-
on Deceased by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:43 PM
Sounds alot like something Mr.Pig wrote that I liked. -8-
on Shadow by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:45 PM
I like how you stick to one subject but this isn't all that great. -5-
on Rainbow Tears by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:49 PM
K big guy, but the try in "Try
Drop
Your pain forever more,
Night
Falls
To lose you in yourself,"
Is that supposed to tears?
-4-
Drop
Your pain forever more,
Night
Falls
To lose you in yourself,"
Is that supposed to tears?
-4-
on Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:52 PM
Je ne parle pas francais.
on some deleted poem
18 Apr 2003, 12:57 PM
Confusing. I get the impression of birth in the first 2 stanzas but I don't feel that follows thru to the rest of the poem. So is this about a baby or a lover? Either way its lovely. -9-
*hacks up a furball* huh?? hmmm??? wha? is it over yet? You lost my attention, about halfway through the first, Stanza/paragraph. It maybe the subject but It feels really repetive, like I've heard it before, redundent, cliche, and so on and so forth and what have ya. It might also be helpful if I could tell if you were being sarcastic with the live=evil rip off, or if you just thought it'd be cute and clever. I see that some effort was put forth(one way or another) and cause I have a real hard time with giving a zero to anything that has some effort, just for you a -2-.
on a 9,000.00$ Philippine script treatment by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:02 PM
Nice screen play. It seems to center more on Emilio than Ferdinand tho. So why is Ferdinand the PRINCIPAL CHARACTER?
on My pimp's ceiling fan by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:23 PM
Once again confusing and I can feel my brain going into the redline so before it explodes -9-
on You Say by adrenalize
12 Apr 2003, 12:45 PM
Shame shame you have my permission to beat them with an old photo frame(no new ones cause why was something new) to the point of unconsiousness but no further! Its over when the lights go out! You Hear me! There are limits to how far you can go even when some one is that big an ANUS.