on Where's heaven? by cleverdevice
12 Apr 2003, 12:34 PM
Well said.
on bottoms up by suckmychucks
9 Apr 2003, 12:38 PM
Witty.
on Feeling the dark by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:08 PM
Been There ALOT. -10-
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 10:55 PM
Excellent on so many levels. 10 in my eyes.
on What Hobbit songs are really like... by Bobjim
11 Apr 2003, 10:57 PM
Fine Fine Weed That You Smoke -9-
on Never get it right by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:01 PM
The wording at the end is a bit confusing. Try keeping to one tense per line(i.e. and why everything we did or said just hurts us more) either drop the s on hurts or change did and said to do or say. Lose the "it" and/or the "right" in the last line. They just muddle your point.
on some deleted poem
12 Apr 2003, 12:33 PM
plagiarist
on A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again)
12 Apr 2003, 8:14 AM
I'm not a big fan of parents but this almost brings tears to my eyes. Very well written. It feels heart felt. Worthy of many more, a -10-!!!
on RSPCA got here just a likkle bit late... by Yardbird
12 Apr 2003, 12:31 PM
If the Judge doesn't give 20 years
I'll bust out my garden shears
And stick'em up your rear
:)
-7-
I'll bust out my garden shears
And stick'em up your rear
:)
-7-
on The Warriors Song by cleverdevice
12 Apr 2003, 12:39 PM
Too much D&D for some body.
on some deleted poem
12 Apr 2003, 12:41 PM
War leads to hell but whose hell are we headed to?
on Okay, so it doesn't actually work, it's still shit-funny... by Yardbird
12 Apr 2003, 12:28 PM
I'm in stiches Cause of those bitches!! -8-
on Porno by Bobjim_returns
9 Apr 2003, 4:25 PM
NO DON'T GO!!!! OH THE HORROR, THE HORROR!!!!
;(
Is it just me or did D.A. look like he hit his own prostate?
;(
Is it just me or did D.A. look like he hit his own prostate?
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2003, 6:57 PM
Yeah I agree. It sux major hanus so many hours lost. Why do farmers need daylight saving? They get up at the crack of dawn anyway. -9-
on All the things i hate by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 9:52 PM
Somebody has been to block buster recently. Sounds a little too close to the movie. There are only 9 I hates tho. Why not add one and be that much closer?
on Nothin lasts by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:22 PM
I think this sounds alot like some of your other work but still very touching
on ode to an english teacher by suckmychucks
10 Apr 2003, 5:16 PM
Why all the limericks?? Why must you shame the irish so?
on two flies by suckmychucks
10 Apr 2003, 5:10 PM
Not Very Witty
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay
A horrible piece
I'm forced to say
I wasn't amused in the least little bit
Whining worse than even me
Which is hard I'll admit
A zero I'm afraid it has to be
Thats all you get
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay
A horrible piece
I'm forced to say
I wasn't amused in the least little bit
Whining worse than even me
Which is hard I'll admit
A zero I'm afraid it has to be
Thats all you get
on I can't write by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:40 PM
I wouldn't say that just not well
on God's Gift by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:39 PM
I read this and You just seem to be repeating your other works. No new thought, no New way of expressing the same thought.