on you will feel by nentwined
27 Mar 2003, 5:02 PM
I must say I thought that was going to be good just from your first line but nope. Not really sure what went wrong but it ended up a trainwreck. -3-
on some deleted poem
4 Apr 2003, 4:01 PM
Disturbing. Well done but extremly disturbing -7-
on Last Nightâs Dream (Freud-o-riffic) by razorgrin
4 Apr 2003, 3:53 PM
Eat less junk food.
on sorry, but i am lame by nolan
29 Mar 2003, 7:59 AM
Hmmm... Amazingly not too lame. In fact I ratter liked it. -9-
on isms and ities by Amelia
7 Apr 2003, 5:12 PM
Awefully pretentious claim in your fourth stanza other than not bad -7-
on Morning Gory by Bobjim
7 Apr 2003, 6:44 PM
See now isn't it just like mommy always said. If you play with it too much.... Hey Your Supposed to be blind not have it fall off wtf?
on Prayer for Peace by razorgrin
4 Apr 2003, 3:50 PM
What War???
on All hail Discordia?(a true haiku story) by razorgrin
4 Apr 2003, 3:58 PM
You should have that looked into smiley. You might wkae up only to find that dream of falling off a cliff to be true -9-.
on some deleted poem
4 Apr 2003, 4:07 PM
I would if I could but I'm broke and The doc says that my insurance only covers me so long as I never use it so sorry.
on some deleted poem
29 Mar 2003, 10:34 AM
Hahahaha thump Hahahahahaha
I fell out of my chair I was laughing so hard. Here -10- before I fall again. LMAO
I fell out of my chair I was laughing so hard. Here -10- before I fall again. LMAO
on Is This Love by intheailse
29 Mar 2003, 7:47 AM
Oh dear child. I had hoped I'd never have to explain this to anyone ever again. Its not love if you have to ask!! Not to mention you give no detail, nadda, none. This is for all intents and purposes a look at the thoughts inside a teenage adolesant mind. Your giving us shallow thoughts with nothing to base them on. No concept of a landscape inside your head or much less of the world around you. If this isn't the worst poem ever written I'll bet its close. -0-
on Red Skies and Thunderflies by intheailse
29 Mar 2003, 7:50 AM
Alright Lyrics -7-
on Distant at best by Crakyamuni
29 Mar 2003, 7:55 AM
Huh? If? Wha? Nevermind confused. It seems to make sense to me but something is nagging at me about it. -10-
till I figure out what it is(that could take awhile) :)
till I figure out what it is(that could take awhile) :)
on Guitar Lesson by Dancer
29 Mar 2003, 8:06 AM
Good Times, Good Times
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
27 Mar 2003, 5:15 PM
Ewww... I never I should have quit reading after the sex but no I thought there will be more sex and then I was like sweet a blow job but then Curiousity got the best of me Anal Ewww... this would be a 60 rounded down to 10 cause there is nothing higher than a 10 but you just lost 51 points for anal enjoy your 9
on Perversions 7: Viva Las Naked by razorgrin
29 Mar 2003, 7:37 AM
Glad your working on new peversions but... I agree these aren't your best but I realise it must be a hard to come up unusal fetishes and five line ways to describe them. -8-
P.S. I know someone who can do the last one. He says it gives him a cramp in the neck.
P.S. I know someone who can do the last one. He says it gives him a cramp in the neck.
on with no words to write (v2) by nentwined
27 Mar 2003, 5:17 PM
eh? Why not -6-
on Our Sweet Lady Lispalot by lunar
5 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
I'd jutht like to thay thatth thwell! -9-
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
27 Mar 2003, 5:31 PM
Tick Tock Tick Tock, The Ever Running Clock
At the chime It will be 7 o'clock
At the chime It will be 7 o'clock