on Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom
13 Oct 2003, 10:48 AM
Still not back but I had a strong urge to write something to be thought about.
on My Fart Is Eternally Yours (Free Sniff) By Yo-Yo by DreamerSupreme
7 Aug 2003, 2:14 PM
lol. You really do seem to have been studying under Horus. -10-.
on Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent
31 Aug 2003, 11:27 AM
I liked it but I think the last verse could go. I love the breaking up of persons ality, clever. -7-
on Be the best, and nothing but by Hostileintent
31 Aug 2003, 11:23 AM
Nice all round. The an in the first line peaks my curiousity a little but I've seen it before. I think you should have kept the repeat of 2nd and 4th line going til the end, but other than that a -8-. I see potential.
on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom
10 Aug 2003, 7:24 PM
This was once in second place, but see what one little zero can do to your average?
on To PinkBunnyofDoom by Vanity
10 Aug 2003, 7:32 PM
Hmmm... Your name suits you.
on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe
8 Aug 2003, 12:31 PM
Definatly gotta be the top one. Go with what you like in poetry. Look never be unwilling to try something new but if it doesn't work out for you then don't do it. Simply put. The top version is well worth a -10- from me. The bottom would be an -8-. So here is a -10-.
on some deleted poem
8 Aug 2003, 10:38 PM
Very good, well written. As for god, I have explained why she doesn't answer anyone. Too many Children, None of them raising their hands, all talking out of turn. Its Tragic really. -10-
on some deleted poem
8 Aug 2003, 12:22 PM
Simple, but it has its own sorta charm to it. -10-
on Undertow by eliastemplar
8 Aug 2003, 12:26 PM
Um... Correct me if I'm wrong here but this isn't a Haiku right? I mean 5-7-5? This is 5, maybe 6, and 4. No vote from me on this one.
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2003, 2:11 PM
Amazing, I was wondering where my other chuck taylor went. -10-
on Inet. mag. editors R jealous red haired Jews, oh and I'm 29 by horus8
7 Aug 2003, 10:40 AM
lol. Happy Birthday Horus, Happy Birthday. -10-
Yuck. If I knew the proper spelling of the sound of vomiting I'd do it right now. This poem is so trite that I didn't get past the second line of the 4th stanza. Have you no consideration for others? If this is the kinda of poetry your going to write, stop right now. I mean it. I rarely give zeros, but this deserves one too much. I'll be nice and leave it at where my comment stands. On the bright side at least it shouldn't be too hard to for improvement, cause hopefully not everything you'll write can be this bad. -0-
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2003, 1:58 AM
Damn fine story telling her. The idea of a Drunken Muse, Who inspires inspiration even though its seems like she is just rambling on aimlessly. You've got an instant Classic here. -10-
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2003, 2:00 AM
Fairly nice story telling here. -8-
on Yellow Cake for Everyone by Retaliate
7 Aug 2003, 2:04 AM
Nice, that actually took me a second to get. -8- Just because I ended up laughing without really getting it until I read it a second time.
on some deleted poem
7 Aug 2003, 2:10 AM
lol. Hopefully tomorrow you aren't its ashes. -10-
on The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme
7 Aug 2003, 2:21 AM
Needed more comparison to a king in his throne for the last line to have worked for me. -8-
on How we found Jesus by Jeremi B. Handrinos
10 Aug 2003, 7:50 PM
Without a doubt, a masterpiece. That was Ace. -10-
on Scattered Spaces by embersandenvelopes
30 Mar 2004, 12:28 PM
Lovely words, and I must agree. We are.