on Perversions 8: The Reckoning by razorgrin
25 Apr 2004, 9:59 PM
Oh How I've waited!
on Something's gone wrong by zodiac
25 Apr 2004, 10:10 PM
Pimple? Borderline, a Masterpiece
on peppermint by the indign
30 Mar 2004, 12:34 PM
Interesting to say the least. Which I'm not known for that. I enjoyed it, and admit it, who wouldn't? It was off the wall and lacking a bit in grammer(But hey like most poets from the before the 20s aren't). -9-
on some deleted poem
30 Mar 2004, 12:38 PM
-9-
on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
30 Mar 2004, 12:42 PM
Much Improvement! I am indeed impressed. -10-
on some deleted poem
30 Mar 2004, 12:45 PM
Wonderful.
on love comes but once by francis nor capule
2 Apr 2004, 10:02 AM
That is the sappiest thing I've ever read. To say the least its wretched. To say the most its honest but lacking in both the wonder that is love and the writing that is poetry. I hope this impressed your "lover" because thats the only person you should have shared this set of words with. This type of peom is whats known as a Pimple. I should know I've written alot of them before they even had it as a poem type. Read more verse. Good Verse. Then try writing. Exsamples here being -=Dark_Angel=- to show you shear verbal skill and intelligence, Godswife and Horus8(In his many different usernames) for depth, humor, and emotion. -2- Just because its honest, horrid, but honest.
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2004, 11:34 AM
I know exactly how that feels.
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2004, 11:39 AM
I think its more of a lyric than a freeverse, emotion beautifully Displayed and easily absorbed.
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2004, 11:45 AM
The image on the 'don't slip' just doesn't seem to fit right. Maybe an Aliteration to Humpty Dumpty would work better, I love the end point.
on My heart had a war...no body won by sonawrote
7 Apr 2004, 11:55 AM
Childish Longing, followed by Adult Realization. The first few stanza's(Thanks Zodiac for making that happen) Seemed a tad pouty and rather brat like, but the last few show true wisdom. -10-
on some deleted poem
10 Apr 2004, 1:47 AM
Hit. That seriously summed up my wish before bed every night, for almost a year. Seriously, beautiful beyond imagination, but you might want to fix that typo (5th Line Last Stanza), other than that absolutly touching.
on Three Bears by hotwire
10 Apr 2004, 1:55 AM
Good the of the Idea of comparing Teddy Bears, something comforting, to Men, without a doubt a odd territory. The execution is overly simplifed and a bit flailing to hold its self together but works out fairly well at the end. -8-
on My Pain 2004 by ToMuchPain04
10 Apr 2004, 2:02 AM
Who Do You Think Your Kidding? You Call This A Free Verse? Pimple, Its Called A Pimple, And ITS TERRIBLE! There is no depth, nothing more than whining, and trying to rhyme. Learn about the art, before you stumble thru another rhyme session with boo-woo your host Bandaid Butter Fingers! -0-
on A Pen Named Ed by Enkidu
10 Apr 2004, 2:05 AM
Masterful, Good Meter, and it made me Giggle
on some deleted poem
10 Apr 2004, 2:09 AM
How very wise indeed, Thou Have shown us the way to our salvation, Praise be to Thee, oh Mighty Teacher -10-
on The True Irony by thepinkbunnyofdoom
25 Apr 2004, 9:19 PM
This is one of my first co-writes.
on Experimental Robot Questionaire by horus8
25 Apr 2004, 9:51 PM
Scary
on Bottom half of a phone by That One
25 Apr 2004, 10:21 PM
A bit bland. Liven it up.
on some deleted poem
28 Apr 2004, 10:22 AM
Let me know if my photo doesn't work