replying on We The People by thepinkbunnyofdoom
25 Mar 2003, 2:40 PM
Glad you like it
replying on Who am I? by thepinkbunnyofdoom
24 Mar 2003, 2:46 PM
I ment hallow. Only by asking yourself who you are, can ask yourself who you want to be.
on So Happy by openwounds
24 Mar 2003, 2:41 PM
Yes. Yes. No (bullets may be fast but knowing my luck I'd miss or something). Been there done that Think I still have a few scars from that, no wait those are the cigarette burns. Maybe It all depends on how good it feels. Nah! They give me my identity.
Now being serious I noticed 'new lesions'. Other than that I it doesn't look like you have any typos that I can see. This lacks you usual hint of detail that makes things what you write have some sense of depth, But I love how you pulled off the 'will you whimper and beg for release' line. -7-
Now being serious I noticed 'new lesions'. Other than that I it doesn't look like you have any typos that I can see. This lacks you usual hint of detail that makes things what you write have some sense of depth, But I love how you pulled off the 'will you whimper and beg for release' line. -7-
replying on Ment to be confusing by thepinkbunnyofdoom
24 Mar 2003, 2:17 PM
Huh??
on The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus
24 Mar 2003, 12:43 AM
Too much acid. Your only suppose to eat one sugar cube at a time!!
replying on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike
24 Mar 2003, 12:31 AM
Well at least your not on the top of the list.
replying on Ugly by openwounds
24 Mar 2003, 12:29 AM
Who really can?
on Fleeting Fantasy by Sawa
24 Mar 2003, 12:17 AM
Hmmm... Amazing. I have given every below a 5 and above it but I have never read a peom that left me felling neutral towards it. So congrats you get my first -5-.
on Easy Way Out by Blindproject217
24 Mar 2003, 12:08 AM
Ouch. Wow, Sorry blind I usually try to find the best in the works of others but this poem has no real heart, no ryhme, and just a slight dash of image. -0-
replying on Pathetic by openwounds
24 Mar 2003, 12:02 AM
K. No problem. Thanks for writing it.
on Ugly by openwounds
23 Mar 2003, 11:58 PM
Wow! Quick style change. I was looking forward to more gore. Or angst. -7-
replying on Pathetic by openwounds
23 Mar 2003, 11:53 PM
How very christan of you Blind. Way to set an example.
As for you open wounds you remind me of this girl I know. If things are as bad as you say they are then you have three major choice you can make. Either change things (Blind's way, or any other), Leave things as they are, be misearible, or option number three. Stop caring about being apart of the crowd and be as absolutly different as you can be. <=#3 could be considered option #1 but it being different isn't really a change for you I guess and its not really staying the same either.
Oh yeah I like this alot. I'd like to use your piece as lyrics for my band with your permission. -10-
Not to be mean or anything but I think your first line is missing a word.
As for you open wounds you remind me of this girl I know. If things are as bad as you say they are then you have three major choice you can make. Either change things (Blind's way, or any other), Leave things as they are, be misearible, or option number three. Stop caring about being apart of the crowd and be as absolutly different as you can be. <=#3 could be considered option #1 but it being different isn't really a change for you I guess and its not really staying the same either.
Oh yeah I like this alot. I'd like to use your piece as lyrics for my band with your permission. -10-
Not to be mean or anything but I think your first line is missing a word.
on Shut Up by openwounds
23 Mar 2003, 11:32 PM
You know a bar of soap is the prefered method of cleasing ones self but I love the gore that comes to mind. 'they just laughed' would have to be the most creepy line. The 'Now I'm pretty' Fits so perfectly and will probably make alot of people quesy.
BOORAH GRANDMA AWARD. -10-
BOORAH GRANDMA AWARD. -10-
replying on Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie
23 Mar 2003, 8:35 PM
I never said that D.A. had a genitalia.
A third party implys someone who can't express a bias. It therefore excludes YOU! Seeing as to how you have never been kind to either of us that makes you bias against the both of us. Two negative bias are still a bias in one direction. You declared me defeated but you already have preconcieved notions about the both of us, so NO.
P.S. What would you have me suck? I know that I would probably refuse on some sort of moral grounds but I must say that I do wonder.
P.S.S. What happened to me me arguing with D.A.?
A third party implys someone who can't express a bias. It therefore excludes YOU! Seeing as to how you have never been kind to either of us that makes you bias against the both of us. Two negative bias are still a bias in one direction. You declared me defeated but you already have preconcieved notions about the both of us, so NO.
P.S. What would you have me suck? I know that I would probably refuse on some sort of moral grounds but I must say that I do wonder.
P.S.S. What happened to me me arguing with D.A.?
replying on Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie
23 Mar 2003, 8:00 PM
Rich. Just rich. Unfortunately You have no authority to inforce your declaration! So sadly no I won't consent defeat(not to mention that you are not an impartial party, seeing as to how you have made comments to me at least, And thus have some background history with one of the debators, and can express a bias either for myself or D.A. <it also doesn't help that I think that you and D.A. are the same person>).
P.S. I wouldn't say soiled. More like dug up and put to proper use, then returned to nature.
P.S. I wouldn't say soiled. More like dug up and put to proper use, then returned to nature.
replying on Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie
23 Mar 2003, 10:17 AM
Melodramatic? Why not. But your last comment makes about as much sense to me as fishing with a hand grenade.
P.S. You already know my age D.A. its yours no one is quite sure about.
P.S. You already know my age D.A. its yours no one is quite sure about.
replying on Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie
23 Mar 2003, 9:01 AM
P.S. If I was in checkmate in a game of words I'd have to admit defeat or a third party would have to decare me defeated. Seeing as that hasn't happened(cause much as it may be hard for you to belive) I haven't been defeated.
"People don't take off for typos as much as you'd think" when equated with mathmatics versus "spelling isn't everything". Thats like equating Mcdonalds with Burgar King. They are almost one another's shadow. Same thing just a slightly different favor.
"People don't take off for typos as much as you'd think" when equated with mathmatics versus "spelling isn't everything". Thats like equating Mcdonalds with Burgar King. They are almost one another's shadow. Same thing just a slightly different favor.
replying on Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie
23 Mar 2003, 8:48 AM
D.A. For you the world is flat and only the complexities of your own ignorance coupled with what you(meaning you D.A. and you alone) believe to be the truths of reality. I know this poem hits on cliche but the fact that it moves me despite its typos is why I like it. Relax. Stop being anal and examining everything with a microscope.
replying on Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie
23 Mar 2003, 6:12 AM
What I was trying to get across is that spelling isn't everything!
Sure its nice but If you can spell excellently but can't convey an image then your poem is going to suck. On the other hand if you can paint that image with your words for the reader to see but can't spell worth a damn your not losing out as much. Yes I am still talking about this poem, The image she lays out is one that is easy to imagine. Plus you can see her feelings of joy and hope for the future. Typos or not its a lovely piece.
Sure its nice but If you can spell excellently but can't convey an image then your poem is going to suck. On the other hand if you can paint that image with your words for the reader to see but can't spell worth a damn your not losing out as much. Yes I am still talking about this poem, The image she lays out is one that is easy to imagine. Plus you can see her feelings of joy and hope for the future. Typos or not its a lovely piece.
on Wither Away by darkhelmet10
22 Mar 2003, 9:10 PM
I really enjoy your writing darkhelmet10. This reminds me of 'Shall I compare thee to a summer's day' By William Shakespeare. -8-