on Pismo shack by New Life Drug
14 Nov 2002, 1:07 PM
the last line is an aside that is not in tune with the rest of the poem, which is vivid and alive.
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 8:20 AM
i am trying, mrs.g, but this one eludes me, mostly. i will print this out and take it to lunch with me. maybe it will bleed for me then.
on some deleted poem
16 Nov 2002, 7:56 PM
i want more beans.
on Wheelin' N Rockin' by INTRANSIT
14 Nov 2002, 10:56 AM
this was a fun ride.
on Dynamic Duo by INTRANSIT
15 Nov 2002, 3:11 PM
oh my. all this happened here? who'd a thunk it. mirror mirror on the wall, where the hell'd that feedback come from?
on some deleted poem
14 Nov 2002, 7:51 AM
very entertaining.
on Phillip by w~* ATHENA *~w
14 Nov 2002, 12:47 PM
sounds lyric, more so
on Rebel Wind by KarmicTwiggy
14 Nov 2002, 10:00 AM
i wish you could post a link to this, with the music. then i could vote on it. it needs to be sung.
on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
14 Nov 2002, 6:41 AM
hey wow--kiki's going to love this one. it's not trite and corny like all of mine, which take much longer to write than the average amount of time i spend on the king's seat. we can't all be bunnies now can we?
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 11:05 AM
okay, here's what i get: all that remembered wrong, seen through the eyes of the young, and revised through eyes more keen. so the stings that were big are smaller, the ones unseen are deeper cuts, and, in an effort to sort it all out, an inventory has been made.
did you despise your own humanity as a child? i did. i saw the cruelty around me, and wanted not to be. human. except for dating the beginning of the meditation, the first stanza is out of place.
did you despise your own humanity as a child? i did. i saw the cruelty around me, and wanted not to be. human. except for dating the beginning of the meditation, the first stanza is out of place.
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 11:50 AM
are "she" and "you" the same person? it is unclear.
on Surreal... by Yardbird
13 Nov 2002, 7:44 AM
very funny. i don't like monkeys, but i like this parody.
on Ode to a Depleted Uranium Shell by Yardbird
13 Nov 2002, 7:45 AM
sparkly. how about an ode to a tenner?
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 7:47 AM
i feel like the last stanza is not as powerful as the others, though it is the Voice that claims the power. hmm.
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 11:54 AM
cool.
on My love for another. by cleverdevice
15 Nov 2002, 3:24 PM
this is lovely, cleverdevice.
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 11:47 AM
it's "tore" but "teared" conjures images of crying...
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 8:09 AM
may i suggest you aske the WISE CLOGG?
on some deleted poem
13 Nov 2002, 11:51 AM
nice metaphor.
on Heart of the killer by UAFANTHORPEY
16 Nov 2002, 7:55 PM
oh please. he can't be scared of you.