on My love for another. by cleverdevice
15 Nov 2002, 3:24 PM
this is lovely, cleverdevice.
on Dynamic Duo by INTRANSIT
15 Nov 2002, 3:11 PM
oh my. all this happened here? who'd a thunk it. mirror mirror on the wall, where the hell'd that feedback come from?
on Pismo shack by New Life Drug
14 Nov 2002, 1:07 PM
the last line is an aside that is not in tune with the rest of the poem, which is vivid and alive.
on Phillip by w~* ATHENA *~w
14 Nov 2002, 12:47 PM
sounds lyric, more so
replying on My Friend? by Blade
14 Nov 2002, 12:33 PM
well no wonder he writes like that. you would too, with all that hydrous oxide in yer veins.
on Wheelin' N Rockin' by INTRANSIT
14 Nov 2002, 10:56 AM
this was a fun ride.
on Rebel Wind by KarmicTwiggy
14 Nov 2002, 10:00 AM
i wish you could post a link to this, with the music. then i could vote on it. it needs to be sung.
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 8:16 AM
damn you! you know i'm off the sauce! foul temptress!
(do you really mean frothy 'beer'?)
(do you really mean frothy 'beer'?)
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 7:45 AM
the poem has some fine moments. i never said it didn't.
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 7:31 AM
you know, now that i have read the most profound, untrite, corn-free poem on the site, i think i'll hang it up as a writer. do you run a kampf somewhere so i can be just like you? because i realize that everything i've been through has been adolescent bullshit, and i should have just kept it in my journal. all of it is nothing compared to the way you melt down things so succintly. and i thought, really, i guess it was silly of me, that somebody else might resonate with some of my experience. you have shown me how meaningless my written words are. would you please help me learn to write so it's not all crap?
thanks ever so much,
your newest disciple
p.s.--thanks for the zeros. get all your friends to give me some too, because it's what i deserve.
p.p.s.--the hairshirt and the cat-o-nine tails are on order, and my peneance will be arduous for having deceived people so with my diary-page-ravings.
thanks ever so much,
your newest disciple
p.s.--thanks for the zeros. get all your friends to give me some too, because it's what i deserve.
p.p.s.--the hairshirt and the cat-o-nine tails are on order, and my peneance will be arduous for having deceived people so with my diary-page-ravings.
replying on Bedside Angel by feathers68
14 Nov 2002, 7:09 AM
well, you use images that are so overused--angels and heaven, for example--and you bring nothing new to the reader. if you are left wanting more, tell us why? give us ssomething new. show us how your lover pleases you. reading this poem is like hearing someone say 'isn't it nice out today' when it's 80 and sunny there's a slight breeze. you state the obvious, and you do it obviously. try describing these experience with words that have texture, or smell, or taste...that's what left you hungry, right?
sorry i was rude.
sorry i was rude.
on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
14 Nov 2002, 6:41 AM
hey wow--kiki's going to love this one. it's not trite and corny like all of mine, which take much longer to write than the average amount of time i spend on the king's seat. we can't all be bunnies now can we?
on Ode to a Depleted Uranium Shell by Yardbird
13 Nov 2002, 7:45 AM
sparkly. how about an ode to a tenner?
on Surreal... by Yardbird
13 Nov 2002, 7:44 AM
very funny. i don't like monkeys, but i like this parody.
on me by spazzman15
12 Nov 2002, 1:42 PM
i'd rather be a hammer than a nail, and the play's the thing to catch a king....
replying on Bedside Angel by feathers68
12 Nov 2002, 1:19 PM
nope. it's the pee, fer shure.
replying on There is no end by INTRANSIT
12 Nov 2002, 12:40 PM
my matter aches all the time, sirrah.