Re: a comment on killer boredom butterfly (esoteric) by nentwined	17-Dec-02/8:08 PM
hard to get the "..."'s out of your head? :)
Re: a comment on with no words to write by nentwined	17-Dec-02/8:07 PM
HA! erm. which one? :)
Re: a comment on with no words to write by nentwined	17-Dec-02/8:07 PM
interesting. the flow of can't -> cannot makes the last line match the others more closely. I hadn't thought of trying that. Thanks. :)
Re: a comment on Elegy by moonUnit	17-Dec-02/8:00 PM
ouch. with that info, quite poignant. marks off for not getting that across to me through the poem, but... ouch. 8
Re: eyes by moonUnit	17-Dec-02/2:14 PM
this I like. it captured a "thing" and played it back from a different perspective. especially the "perhaps they just imagined you" twist. :)
Re: Various actions by New Life Drug	17-Dec-02/2:11 PM
no thank you.
Re: Elegy by moonUnit	17-Dec-02/2:10 PM
hannah sounds familiar. the rest don't ring a bell. ? color me clueless, I'll refrain from voting.
Re: fire by bxjay170	17-Dec-02/1:36 PM
interesting. any reason you used /'s as linebreaks? damned glad I put in the "wordwrap ~ 72 chars" code a few days ago. this seems like a reasonable rap, but I don't see anything here that makes it stand out from the crowd.
Re: Misplaced admoration by deep-as-a-puddle	17-Dec-02/12:58 PM
too much "forced the line to fit the rhyme". rhythm could use work.
Re: Caged World by deep-as-a-puddle	17-Dec-02/12:57 PM
mame? or maim? very different things. one's an arcade game emulator. reads like a bunch of cliches strung together. :/
Re: Trust by hobojo	17-Dec-02/12:56 PM
drown(ed?) hmm. nah.
Re: Of Deformed Frogs and Prosperity by Quarton	17-Dec-02/12:02 PM
hmm. good social commentary, ish -- except it was too *thick* to read through, back and forth, on and on. and I'd be one to agree with you (at least what I read through).
Re: I Can Write A Wrong, But I Can't Right A Poem by horus8	17-Dec-02/11:49 AM
definitely an other. I have to admit I didn't make it to the bottom, but I enjoyed what I skimmed.
Re: a comment on Surreal... by Yardbird	17-Dec-02/11:48 AM
well, I for one just glazed over the Fulham FC bit. "whatever" :)
Re: Surreal... by Yardbird	17-Dec-02/11:47 AM
good surreal, but no rhyming?
Re: The Dreamer by Nicholas Jones	17-Dec-02/11:40 AM
very well done. 9
Re: THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void	17-Dec-02/11:37 AM
THIS HURTS.
Re: making progress (a piece of it) by Limness	17-Dec-02/11:33 AM
this isn't amazingly original, but it's very pretty; well done, really. 8
Re: The Phoebe Snow by horus8	17-Dec-02/11:32 AM
cute, but the last stanza didn't wrap it together for me. 6
Re: a comment on with no words to write by nentwined	17-Dec-02/11:30 AM
maybe without the "and" in the last line? yeah. 'ethers', the more I look at it, fails somehow. maybe 'embers' would work. that ties in lost things, and a touch of fire which I always love... :)