poemranker ::20 most recent comments by nentwined (761-780) and replies

Comments bynentwined, 761–780 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on killer boredom butterfly (esoteric) by nentwined 17 Dec 2002, 8:08 PM
hard to get the "..."'s out of your head? :)
replying on with no words to write by nentwined 17 Dec 2002, 8:07 PM
HA!

erm. which one? :)
replying on with no words to write by nentwined 17 Dec 2002, 8:07 PM
interesting. the flow of can't -> cannot makes the last line match the others more closely. I hadn't thought of trying that. Thanks. :)
replying on Elegy by moonUnit 17 Dec 2002, 8:00 PM
ouch. with that info, quite poignant. marks off for not getting that across to me through the poem, but... ouch. 8
on eyes by moonUnit 17 Dec 2002, 2:14 PM
this I like. it captured a "thing" and played it back from a different perspective. especially the "perhaps they just imagined you" twist. :)
on Various actions by New Life Drug 17 Dec 2002, 2:11 PM
no thank you.
on Elegy by moonUnit 17 Dec 2002, 2:10 PM
hannah sounds familiar. the rest don't ring a bell. ? color me clueless, I'll refrain from voting.
on fire by bxjay170 17 Dec 2002, 1:36 PM
interesting. any reason you used /'s as linebreaks? damned glad I put in the "wordwrap ~ 72 chars" code a few days ago. this seems like a reasonable rap, but I don't see anything here that makes it stand out from the crowd.
on Misplaced admoration by deep-as-a-puddle 17 Dec 2002, 12:58 PM
too much "forced the line to fit the rhyme". rhythm could use work.
on Caged World by deep-as-a-puddle 17 Dec 2002, 12:57 PM
mame? or maim? very different things. one's an arcade game emulator.

reads like a bunch of cliches strung together. :/
on Trust by hobojo 17 Dec 2002, 12:56 PM
drown(ed?)

hmm. nah.
on Of Deformed Frogs and Prosperity by Quarton 17 Dec 2002, 12:02 PM
hmm. good social commentary, ish -- except it was too *thick* to read through, back and forth, on and on. and I'd be one to agree with you (at least what I read through).
on I Can Write A Wrong, But I Can't Right A Poem by horus8 17 Dec 2002, 11:49 AM
definitely an other. I have to admit I didn't make it to the bottom, but I enjoyed what I skimmed.
replying on Surreal... by Yardbird 17 Dec 2002, 11:48 AM
well, I for one just glazed over the Fulham FC bit. "whatever" :)
on Surreal... by Yardbird 17 Dec 2002, 11:47 AM
good surreal, but no rhyming?
on The Dreamer by Nicholas Jones 17 Dec 2002, 11:40 AM
very well done. 9
on THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void 17 Dec 2002, 11:37 AM
THIS HURTS.
on making progress (a piece of it) by Limness 17 Dec 2002, 11:33 AM
this isn't amazingly original, but it's very pretty; well done, really. 8
on The Phoebe Snow by horus8 17 Dec 2002, 11:32 AM
cute, but the last stanza didn't wrap it together for me. 6
replying on with no words to write by nentwined 17 Dec 2002, 11:30 AM
maybe without the "and" in the last line?

yeah. 'ethers', the more I look at it, fails somehow. maybe 'embers' would work. that ties in lost things, and a touch of fire which I always love... :)