on Healing by hobojo
27 Feb 2009, 5:56 AM
meh
on Bacchus and the Ivy by <{Baba^Yaga}>
27 Feb 2009, 5:56 AM
"and why it might"?
Has a good lyric sense to it, but it feels like too much nonsense, too. A touch of bob dylan, a touch of the beatles, and other things I recognize but can't name--but I think more it winds up just "touched".
Then again, 6am, I might be reading too much or too little...
In the end, I enjoyed it, and that's always a plus.
Has a good lyric sense to it, but it feels like too much nonsense, too. A touch of bob dylan, a touch of the beatles, and other things I recognize but can't name--but I think more it winds up just "touched".
Then again, 6am, I might be reading too much or too little...
In the end, I enjoyed it, and that's always a plus.
on My love is drowning in PCP by T. Jonathron Remp
27 Feb 2009, 5:53 AM
I like "shine spasm". The rest doesn't work so much for me.
on panpragmalogoethospathos by malpaso
27 Feb 2009, 5:52 AM
interesting. there's chunks and cake and nugget here. but kind of disheartening to pick them out of the puke. refine?
replying on brain cookies by nentwined
26 Feb 2009, 9:56 PM
woot woot :D
replying on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined
14 Feb 2009, 9:05 PM
It definitely goes in cycles. But this one's definitely more of a downer than previous ones.
In the bus terminal of the future... poemranker is the writing on the wall.
I'm thinking of making it iPhone-friendly.
Any thoughts on how to get fresh blood? Just need people reading and commenting and voting... or more typically just commenting and voting ;)
In the bus terminal of the future... poemranker is the writing on the wall.
I'm thinking of making it iPhone-friendly.
Any thoughts on how to get fresh blood? Just need people reading and commenting and voting... or more typically just commenting and voting ;)
on Mountain Fever by Celticai
14 Oct 2008, 7:12 PM
As someone else wrote on one of your poems--"get out of my head!" Feels very much like something I would have written ten years ago (though I never really went for staircases).
That said, I find a lot of your words redundant (and in such a way as to render their compatriots less powerful). And the piece as a whole is missing some novelty, flow, or something to set it apart from a multitude of poems like it. Perhaps you can make it more personal?
That said, I find a lot of your words redundant (and in such a way as to render their compatriots less powerful). And the piece as a whole is missing some novelty, flow, or something to set it apart from a multitude of poems like it. Perhaps you can make it more personal?
There's a lot here, some I'd like to see plumbed more deeply, some could well be spun off into its own ruminations ((striving to capture the correct word could be a novel, I think; then, I didn't get enough sleep last night))
The flow feels more like you're trying to find the poem (which is how I tend to write, myself, so maybe I'm reading too much into that). As it stands, I find it too clunky. But lots of promise.
The flow feels more like you're trying to find the poem (which is how I tend to write, myself, so maybe I'm reading too much into that). As it stands, I find it too clunky. But lots of promise.
replying on A List of Names Worth Listing by SupremeDreamer
29 Jul 2008, 11:58 PM
Just a note--I'm actually getting all of his "comments via email" as bounces. But they're fun, so don't mind me.
replying on Magazine Promotion by nentwined
29 Jul 2008, 11:55 PM
How do you mean where is it? http://www.gudmagazine.com/
It's churning along, right on (some vague sense of) schedule - our fourth issue went to print yesterday. :)
Removed the banner from poemranker because I decided I'd rather have the ranker running than a stupid ad nobody clicked on. I have the relatively unobtrusive links at the bottom, still. :)
Seeing some old faces of a sudden, and it feels good :D
It's churning along, right on (some vague sense of) schedule - our fourth issue went to print yesterday. :)
Removed the banner from poemranker because I decided I'd rather have the ranker running than a stupid ad nobody clicked on. I have the relatively unobtrusive links at the bottom, still. :)
Seeing some old faces of a sudden, and it feels good :D
replying on Magazine Promotion by nentwined
29 Jul 2008, 11:53 PM
I hope so. But on that day I couldn't seem to. :)
And it's kind of tough to make worldly something I normally just whine about--sort of a system purge. But hopefully it was interesting anyway.
Thanks :)
And it's kind of tough to make worldly something I normally just whine about--sort of a system purge. But hopefully it was interesting anyway.
Thanks :)
replying on Cinematic Indulgence by nentwined
22 Jul 2008, 3:51 PM
Thanks :)
Any thoughts on where else you would have liked to see it go, or questions you would have liked answered?
Any thoughts on where else you would have liked to see it go, or questions you would have liked answered?
on Purple Reign of Blood by Kamikaze
2 Jul 2008, 2:40 AM
definitely something many folks have envisioned with glee. the rhymes are blatantly forced (with pseudo-poetic grammatical restructuring and all that goodness) ... good for a quick chuckle?
on The United Face of Totally Grody by Shardik
2 Jul 2008, 2:38 AM
ow. I couldn't read it. great job of "what the hell".
on We can all be free with our legs by daggatolar
2 Jul 2008, 2:37 AM
strange. but I still don't know if I want you to go around with your legs open. what happened to good old crawling around with nothing but your arms as motive force?
on There can be only one by Shardik
2 Jul 2008, 2:36 AM
definitely has something (situational plot). If you could inject a little more context and a little less highlander...
on Under a better bed wetter by Shardik
2 Jul 2008, 2:35 AM
hilarious, but doesn't really do it for me as a poem. goes on a bit much, and while you get kudos on "lugubriously", ... eh. thanks for the cheer anyway :)
I know you weren't going for "quality", but there's room for art in it anyway. Though one man's art is another's bed wetting, sure...
I know you weren't going for "quality", but there's room for art in it anyway. Though one man's art is another's bed wetting, sure...
replying on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined
2 Jul 2008, 2:31 AM
Thanks :D