nice sex/hunt Ahab

dieing=dying (last stanza)
in the first stanza, I think it should say "an awkward little runt" because in that stanza you are talking about yourself in 1st and 3rd person, and saying "The awkward little runt" sounds like another voice is saying it.

I would separate every and day if I were you, because everyday isn't the same as every day, everyday implies boring or commonplace.

Nice, I love the last stanza. If you took out some of the complete sentences/wasted words like "that" and "the", I think it would be even better.

I like it all, especially 2nd verse, but am distracted by 1st line and 11th

Wasn't Billy Collins the movie with the English dancing boy? Nice poem.

I love "drank till my nerves were /wired like an afro". Well done.

nice play there, it feels like you are going to be angry at the beginning of the second stanza, but then your narrator has surrendered.

I don't get the first verse at all. Second is nice.

"Menstrual Mongoose"! Hooray!

This was fun, but are you purposely messing up the contractions and the singular v/s plural"nobody"? It is distracting.

3rd verse is the best. Fourth verse typo "ache"?

Beautiful and real. "flute through the easy powder"?

I like the placement of your punctuation- how it makes each phrase part of the line and part of a more complete thought with their different meanings.

Perfect except for the "never, never" repetition, I don't think it needed the clarification about the last juncture/ kiss goodnight thing.

I agree, I thought?

I loved your wordplay, and am trying to get the movement of your non-sequiturs.