on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
20 Aug 2003, 1:45 PM
I liked the first three paragraphs. The fourth one broke apart, I think. Maybe massage the second and forth line in the last paragraph?
on Those Crazy's people in my brainsky by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:41 PM
very very fluid.
replying on Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:30 PM
"ever/forever/whereever rhymes shouldn't really work?" and why not? They seem to work just fine. You're right that this poem reads well though.
on Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:29 PM
I like this one. The point is clear, the rthym fluid, and your personality shows through. Smart.
on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme
20 Aug 2003, 1:21 PM
I like it. Picturesque like pork loins being salted on your mobile patio.
on Under a better bed wetter by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:09 PM
I love this. It's disgusting and beautiful at the same time. Like life.
on Perversions 5: Kink vs. Mothra by razorgrin
20 Aug 2003, 1:08 PM
Did you write this or did someone else? Instead of inserting a phrase explaining your spelling errors, why not just take the time to use spell check?
on Love-Anemic by dragonfly
20 Aug 2003, 12:58 PM
This poem is great. If I were you, I would keep it close to me and maybe rework it a few different ways just to see where it takes you. It has the essence of a def poetry performance for sure!
replying on I'll be your Gimp by GAY AS FU*K
20 Aug 2003, 12:15 PM
I often find it extremely ironic how quickly another writer would come to censor someone's expression. Force our sexuality? As if we have not been forced your sexuality for centuries. We're here, we're queer, so let's drink a beer and toast to the bigots of which we will not fear.
on I'll be your Gimp by GAY AS FU*K
20 Aug 2003, 12:10 PM
Very interesting. Expressive in a provocative and unrelenting manor.
on ? by Crakyamuni
20 Aug 2003, 11:53 AM
I like this poem very much. It has emotion, fluid verse, and sort of...kind of reminds me of when I scratch a chaulk board for fun.
on Dance With Me by marvelis
20 Aug 2003, 11:52 AM
too cliche' for me.
on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike
20 Aug 2003, 11:49 AM
very educational.
on A gift by Birdman42s
20 Aug 2003, 11:47 AM
kind of cliche'
on Memorial Park by Mona Lisa
20 Aug 2003, 11:47 AM
nice