on Covers by sonawrote
31 Jan 2004, 3:56 AM
It's quite close to something good but it's kept back a bit, i think, by some of the rhymes and that last part where disguise is repeated - somehow gets difficult there. I'd say worth re-working a bit.
on To Avalon by annabellee
31 Jan 2004, 3:59 AM
A good synthesis and gently embedded rhymes - but I can't decide if it's too long or too short...
on some deleted poem
30 Jan 2004, 1:12 PM
This is twice as good as the tripe CLS just spewed -
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2004, 8:25 AM
needing to make some changes....
on Tales From The Outhouse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
1 Feb 2004, 7:48 PM
Brilliant.
Anyone voting less than an *almighty* TEN - is an ass - and I mean that, else God take my eyes.
Anyone voting less than an *almighty* TEN - is an ass - and I mean that, else God take my eyes.
on Something's gone wrong by zodiac
5 Feb 2004, 2:08 PM
spacing makes me a bit screwed up
but then (I was always a bit so)
what does it all mean? I guess I'll have to use your scale of measurement for such things.
but then (I was always a bit so)
what does it all mean? I guess I'll have to use your scale of measurement for such things.
on There is a pea in my bed by w~* ATHENA *~w
4 Feb 2004, 6:00 PM
why you be a plagiarisah? tha be bad.
bad gir.
bad gir.
on Prize gained life, Death in wages by GTK
5 Feb 2004, 8:56 PM
close.
on without music by Limness
5 Feb 2004, 8:58 PM
what you say is not badly said - yet...
on The City (New Jerusaem) by blkarak
5 Feb 2004, 8:59 PM
too much of not enough.
on Damien by Sugarbbybuttrfly
5 Feb 2004, 8:59 PM
you are = you're
on Monday by betty swallox
5 Feb 2004, 9:06 PM
what is this shirty you speak of?
on some deleted poem
5 Feb 2004, 9:19 PM
gonna agree with zodiac; this is a good start - a conceptual sketch.
on some deleted poem
5 Feb 2004, 9:21 PM
RM, I like the idea of it; dunno - I think I'm thrown by the part rhyme, part not combined with word choices that seem selected specifically to rhyme - yet have no mate. S3 espec.
on A Panglossian Farmer by richa
5 Feb 2004, 9:24 PM
paints an interesting picture; fresh.
walls? plural? why?
I like the "week in plaster" but it pulls me from a simpler time; smacks of technology - maybe a splint?
walls? plural? why?
I like the "week in plaster" but it pulls me from a simpler time; smacks of technology - maybe a splint?
on some deleted poem
7 Feb 2004, 5:05 AM
Most gays are only faking it to get attention - same with straight people.
This is especially true on poemranker, and specifically true in settle's case.
This is especially true on poemranker, and specifically true in settle's case.
on some deleted poem
7 Feb 2004, 5:14 AM
was the cold-cut bologna by any chance?
Your love of mathematics is obvious. cool title.
Your love of mathematics is obvious. cool title.
on some deleted poem
7 Feb 2004, 5:21 AM
Hey, its a cute ditty; more craft than art - and occasionally that's not a terrible thing.
high marks for accessibility - poetry for the wheelchaired masses (and/or harnessed, as the case may be).
Suggestion: change "for fun" to "diversion" - it rhymes a bit better with conclusion. You may want to stick a descriptor in there, "happy", or "playful"; something like that.
You could also change the title to "pool and poetry"...
high marks for accessibility - poetry for the wheelchaired masses (and/or harnessed, as the case may be).
Suggestion: change "for fun" to "diversion" - it rhymes a bit better with conclusion. You may want to stick a descriptor in there, "happy", or "playful"; something like that.
You could also change the title to "pool and poetry"...