on some deleted poem
1 Jul 2006, 9:37 AM
Not your best...meh. *6*
on A naughty strumpet by John Rambo
29 May 2006, 6:23 PM
Brilliant! *10*
on some deleted poem
1 Jul 2006, 9:36 AM
wonderful *9* i love
"spruces colored green
spruces colored blue
spruces that can bleed
death to you know who"
"spruces colored green
spruces colored blue
spruces that can bleed
death to you know who"
on some deleted poem
1 Jul 2006, 9:34 AM
I really enjoy this, your style is very original and people who don't like it probably consider themselves high art aficionados. I loathe poets.
on Shy, quiet by Ranger
4 Apr 2006, 11:50 PM
Wow, this is great, except for the way the first line is broken up. Would've done it differently. So, *9*
on Narcolepsy by Sunny
14 Apr 2006, 12:53 PM
I admire your ability to invent simple and beautiful phrases, however, this does not flow well and you seemed to struggle with how abstract you wanted the form to be. *7*
on some deleted poem
22 May 2006, 12:04 AM
Good,
Contemporary factor makes it too expendable,
But still good
*9*
Contemporary factor makes it too expendable,
But still good
*9*
on some deleted poem
14 May 2006, 8:51 PM
Job, darn well. Grammar implied. *9*
on some deleted poem
14 May 2006, 8:51 PM
Job, darn well. Grammar implied.
on A mans obligation by kliq
6 May 2006, 9:34 PM
If you had spelled two correctly, this would be brilliant. *8*
on some deleted poem
6 May 2006, 9:43 PM
Fantastique! *9*
on Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams by Ranger
28 Apr 2006, 8:00 PM
This is definitely a poet's poem. I feel confident enough when I say that this may be the best pure poem on this site. It is catchy, raw, truly FREE verse. It even has the punch at the end that makes your eyes move back to the top and start over again. No matter what the scores on this poem, it deserves no less than a primary addition to my favorites. Of course, Ranger, nothing short of greatness should be expected from you. I hope I've tooted your horn quite sufficiently.
*10*
*10*
on take a jump with me by hendrimike
16 Apr 2006, 11:02 AM
decent ode, but sort of stalled and unconvincing. *6*
on some deleted poem
14 Apr 2006, 12:50 PM
I liked this a ton. The stream of consciousness aspect is pretty remarkable because it picks up momentum and carries this piece. The writing style can be a bit dragging, but it just gets better as is lengthens. Particularly enjoyed "even quantum leaps can make an educated man yawn" and "Dinosaurs drive my car! Dinosaurs drive my car! Their extinction
expedites my own." *10*
expedites my own." *10*
on Another quarter. by richa
16 Apr 2006, 10:56 AM
Th last two lines are great. "I sniff" and "frozen pie" seemed a little off to me. *7*
on Skellington Bakery by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
16 Apr 2006, 10:51 AM
Very original, very intriguing. I though this was a fantastic endeavor. *10*
on some deleted poem
4 Apr 2006, 11:46 PM
A couple things irked me "explode out life" I get it but it's annoying. I think the part with "that their sipping chocolate milk" is a bit mixed up. Otherwise, very good. *7*
on some deleted poem
4 Apr 2006, 11:53 PM
Truly wonderful lines here
"I know your eyes are not
Oracular jewels.
But still, in my heart
Obession rules." So far, these may be some of my favorite lines ever. *10*
"I know your eyes are not
Oracular jewels.
But still, in my heart
Obession rules." So far, these may be some of my favorite lines ever. *10*