replying on Portrait of a King by MacFrantic
3 Aug 2006, 12:32 PM
This is actually less complicated then it seems. The title is accurate. The narrator is looking at the portrait of a king. The reference to God is sarcastic.
on Here's your God by Caducus
2 Aug 2006, 8:40 PM
Just good poetry...
on A Poem For George Bush by Edna Sweetlove
31 Jul 2006, 1:09 PM
Good rant. Good ol free speech.
on A Cripples Brittle Broken Bones by creepshow
31 Jul 2006, 1:07 PM
A bit too busy here. The tense changes are a little annoying. However, the last four lines are outstanding and the concept is good.
on you & you all congregators by A. Nomaly
31 Jul 2006, 1:05 PM
Great.
replying on Two Fundamentalists Playing Cribbage by MacFrantic
13 Jul 2006, 11:17 PM
Thank you, much and often
replying on An Affair with Letters by MacFrantic
8 Jul 2006, 5:37 PM
I could possibly mean what the title plainly says. It's about affairs and "The Lord's untimely sinning" seems to suit an affair. Oh, and "The" does not begin with W. I see no point in your comment.
replying on The Angle of your Downfall by MacFrantic
5 Jul 2006, 8:04 PM
Curiouser and curiouser is a reference to Alice in Wonderland. I'd like to think that falling is one of my more consistent themes and this seemed quite appropriate.
replying on Late Break by MacFrantic
28 Jun 2006, 7:33 PM
I rather liked 'deconstruct,' as it lent itself well to the structure. Thank you very much.
on A naughty strumpet by John Rambo
29 May 2006, 6:23 PM
Brilliant! *10*
replying on Descendent by MacFrantic
25 May 2006, 10:50 AM
"descendent" has double meaning. It signifies movement downward as well as the relation to ancestors. "descendant" only relates to ancestry.
Also, I was just very lazy with the punctuation. I don't even know why I bothered.
I'm glad you were displeased by the quality of this poem.
It wasn't written to your liking (thank god).
Also, I was just very lazy with the punctuation. I don't even know why I bothered.
I'm glad you were displeased by the quality of this poem.
It wasn't written to your liking (thank god).
replying on For Thou by MacFrantic
9 May 2006, 7:22 PM
'Thee' would assume I am talking directly to the person this is for, and not to myself. Example: 'For thou...in the trees."
Also, I never used 'you' directly. I did, in fact, use 'you've' which works better for meter. Note: I used 'my', not 'mine' as well.
Also, I never used 'you' directly. I did, in fact, use 'you've' which works better for meter. Note: I used 'my', not 'mine' as well.
on A mans obligation by kliq
6 May 2006, 9:34 PM
If you had spelled two correctly, this would be brilliant. *8*
on Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams by Ranger
28 Apr 2006, 8:00 PM
This is definitely a poet's poem. I feel confident enough when I say that this may be the best pure poem on this site. It is catchy, raw, truly FREE verse. It even has the punch at the end that makes your eyes move back to the top and start over again. No matter what the scores on this poem, it deserves no less than a primary addition to my favorites. Of course, Ranger, nothing short of greatness should be expected from you. I hope I've tooted your horn quite sufficiently.
*10*
*10*
replying on The Way of Monsters by MacFrantic
20 Apr 2006, 12:08 PM
Thank you to no limit. I had to do a little editing. "gears" was supposed to be "fears"(I don't know how I overlooked that). I also didn't like that the first stanza was a question, so I changed it. And yes, this poem is about vikings/barbarians. Very keen of you, Ranger.