on Ann & Dan & I by Goad
7 Feb 2005, 12:37 AM
I wonder if you've seen this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
As anybody who's read "A Room of One's Own" knows (and that's probably nearly everyone who knows anything), "poetess" and "girly" have never been considered opposing options for women. In fact, poetry is historically the domain of good domestic girls, being usually somewhat shallower and more maudlin than other literary forms, and also easier to write during soapopera commercials. That you don't already know this is yet another stain on your much besmirch'd reputation.
I predict you'll say something about how this poem is not about girls and poetesses, but rather about something unrelated and at present unimaginable.
I predict you'll say something about how this poem is not about girls and poetesses, but rather about something unrelated and at present unimaginable.
on some deleted poem
5 Feb 2005, 1:02 AM
The past-present mixup in the parentheses is a little off-putting. To say the least.
on rear view mirror by damianlow
6 Feb 2005, 1:15 AM
Have I seen you on "Taxicab Confessions"?
on Clouds by dancin_n_da_moonlite
6 Feb 2005, 1:17 AM
The 'foil' and 'silver lining' part was cool. It doesn't make the rest of the poem worth it, though.
on DUI Violation by amateurR
6 Feb 2005, 1:19 AM
I like the last line. I would probably rewrite everything else. Try including some poetry along the way, and maybe making a couple of real sentences.
on On Being Born by emilyowey
6 Feb 2005, 1:20 AM
Great. Are you really Emily Dickinson?
on Lust, and the Sad Soul by woodstock20000
7 Feb 2005, 12:43 AM
You mean "It shudders in its own immortality." And "its" in the next line, too.
"wonders" should be "wanders". And you can't wander "along" a place. You can wander along a promenade, the bank of a winding creek, or nearly anything else commonly understood as having length. A "place" does not.
"wonders" should be "wanders". And you can't wander "along" a place. You can wander along a promenade, the bank of a winding creek, or nearly anything else commonly understood as having length. A "place" does not.
on a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo
7 Feb 2005, 12:45 AM
"beakniks" - Great.
on some deleted poem
17 Feb 2005, 4:43 AM
In all seriousness, if you weren't so always, "If you want, take all of me; I give it freely" you'd probably get more.
PS-Don't reply, '*glum* I guess, But I can't help being who I am'. I know.
PS-Don't reply, '*glum* I guess, But I can't help being who I am'. I know.
on some deleted poem
17 Feb 2005, 4:44 AM
Have you ever actually fucked? I mean, outside your imagination? It's really not that worth dying over. At least, with me it's not.
on some deleted poem
17 Feb 2005, 4:32 AM
Close to Uranus (Free verse) by Caducus
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Oh, forget it.
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Oh, forget it.
on A Sinner’s Prayer by Dovina
17 Feb 2005, 4:24 AM
Q: Do you think God reads your poems?
Q2: Do you think God pays more attention to your poems than he does to, say, the Sri Lankan praying 'O God please whatever you do don't send a tidal wave anytime soon, see I just bought this new car and it's a Hyundai with leather interior standard etc etc etc'?
Q3: You're a Christian. I know this isn't a question. If you just admitted you were a Christian, you'd be happier maybe, but probably not.
Q4: Dear me, your 8 months on poemranker have put you on the side of
- preaching
- didacticism
- illogics forcibly repeated in the face of uncomfortable reason
- telling not showing
- flagrant cronyism
- affirmative action
- racists
- misspelling
- more illogic
- and God.
Are you George W. Bush?
Q2: Do you think God pays more attention to your poems than he does to, say, the Sri Lankan praying 'O God please whatever you do don't send a tidal wave anytime soon, see I just bought this new car and it's a Hyundai with leather interior standard etc etc etc'?
Q3: You're a Christian. I know this isn't a question. If you just admitted you were a Christian, you'd be happier maybe, but probably not.
Q4: Dear me, your 8 months on poemranker have put you on the side of
- preaching
- didacticism
- illogics forcibly repeated in the face of uncomfortable reason
- telling not showing
- flagrant cronyism
- affirmative action
- racists
- misspelling
- more illogic
- and God.
Are you George W. Bush?
on Lent Begins by jessicazee
17 Feb 2005, 4:34 AM
This was better before.
on Little Fly by PodPoet
17 Feb 2005, 4:41 AM
Dear Christ. So my wife works in this town called Ghwor, on the site of Sodom and Gomorrah in modern-day Jordan, and says the flies there are so nuts it's worse than Somalian starving baby footage, but what do you expect, most of the townfolk (10% born disabled) squat over a hole in the kitchen floor to go to the bathroom? So anyway, last week they all got Typhoid there, I mean like all of them, and Jesus Christ - Typhoid! Like I didn't even know that disease existed anymore. Anyway I just wanted to tell you I'm with -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I., flies are exactly what we need more of here, and a great way to capture the image of a kinda humming, eyeitching, omnipresent love sent from above. You get my only heartfelt 10 of the day. Enjoy!
on ~RePOST~Cupid's Arrow <----<< by nothingtoanyone
17 Feb 2005, 4:49 AM
Complete the following sentences:
1) Old Shakespeary kinds of poems are _______________
2) I have read ___ Shakespeary poems.
1) Old Shakespeary kinds of poems are _______________
2) I have read ___ Shakespeary poems.
on No Name by hatedestruction
17 Feb 2005, 4:51 AM
Has anyone but you bothered to read or listen to this all the way to the end? -10-
on Summing Up by Dovina
18 Feb 2005, 11:04 PM
Delete the last stanza.
on If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm
18 Feb 2005, 11:32 PM
This poem is simply astonishing.