Re: a comment on Grieving by d35	25-Jan-04/11:48 AM
If it isn't gown, it should be. But I think he means ground.
Re: a comment on Martyrs in suburbia - (we wander like breezes) by zodiac	25-Jan-04/10:43 AM
Good call on the TO in the second stanza. I might risk losing my two - that's right, two! - 10s to change it. Otherwise all later readers will just have to consider it there. The immortal catechesis is a little odd, not a metaphor for poemranker per se, but a metaphor for growing up Catholic (and a serious one) with the expectation that being burned at a stake is better than, say, sitting on the hood of a car at night drinking Coronas.
Re: a comment on the small drop by richa	25-Jan-04/9:50 AM
Yeah. guess I'll stick with only semi-topical comments.
Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus	25-Jan-04/8:45 AM
The title needs changing. Possibly just to 'The Blossom Tree'? Just a suggestion. Notice I'm still giving you a ten.
Re: a comment on Grieving by d35	25-Jan-04/8:44 AM
It's 'ground' not 'grown'.
Re: The Upside-Down Frown by fevriere	25-Jan-04/8:38 AM
You win the coveted 'Golden Spiral-bound Notebook' for the day if CLS/Lydia-Evelyn and Princess Snowflake don't post. It comes with a purple wobble pen.
Re: A Glass of Water by Princess_Snowflake	25-Jan-04/8:34 AM
And I felt good about the 10 you gave me, rockmage, until I started counting all the 10s you've given other people recently. What do you do when a poem is not say-nothing fluff like this? Do you have an 11 in reserve?
Re: A Glass of Water by Princess_Snowflake	25-Jan-04/8:31 AM
This is not a limerick.
Re: the small drop by richa	25-Jan-04/8:28 AM
Good as always. Comments: 1.) the comma after 'water' shouldn't be there. Maybe you could put a line break there instead. 2.) there should be some kind of punctuation after the end of the first stanza 3.) 'a sunlight' is weird when just 'they were sunlight' would be just as good. You get a nine because, though it's not perfect, it's better than all the crap getting unwarranted 9s and 10s on this site.
Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake	25-Jan-04/4:32 AM
I can't believe you reposted this.
Re: a comment on The Grandfather Suite by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	24-Jan-04/9:54 PM
Sorry - who again ARE you? >>>>> tomcheese@hotmail.com subscribed to chat@poemranker.com ... Location: canada ... Last poems posted: what's behind a plop 24-Jan-04/10:40 AM NN 19-Dec-03/2:41 AM horus8 you have a lot of explaining to do 18-Dec-03/4:23 PM
Re: a comment on Sci-fi ode to poemranker nicknames by zodiac	24-Jan-04/9:45 PM
Jesus is a Greek nickname for a Hebrew. And who the hell do you think you are? If you can explain without nicknames or hiding behind your oh-so-liberating internet anonymity, then this poem isn't about you. Besides, it's obviously just a sci-fi story idea too weak to put into prose with a quirky only-halfway-related title.
Re: Lullaby by Goad	23-Jan-04/1:07 PM
I was cool until "left over from the war." Are you serious? And if you are, still don't say that. The best part is the first stanza. And if you're wondering why I gave yellowtail a 9 for a poem with one of those accented past-tenses ('claspèd') and you got just an 8 it's because I assume yellowtail is an adolescent and (as of now) that you are not.
Re: a comment on Sci-fi ode to poemranker nicknames by zodiac	23-Jan-04/12:10 PM
There was an earlier and longer version with an extended conversation between Blake and a Baron von Goering (seriously) that dark angel would have gotten and nobody else, including myself. I'm glad it's dead. And yes, it does suck to endlessly comment on your own posts.
Re: a comment on Sci-fi ode to poemranker nicknames by zodiac	23-Jan-04/12:08 PM
I have to say (reading it now after 9 hours of hideous MA comps) that it does have a kind of logic to it. Even more, maybe, than I thought when I deliriously wrote it this morning.
Re: His Master's Jodhpurs by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	23-Jan-04/12:03 PM
I meant to say it doesn't sound like Poe. Sounds like Burns and Joyce (of course) but better. Poe was too clumsy, even in the dark tarn of Auber poem which I can't remember the name of now. And I think Jodhpurs is a great touch and don't know enough about Briticisms to know if you made it up or not.
Re: His Master's Jodhpurs by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	23-Jan-04/12:00 PM
Perfect. Put periods at the ends of the stanzas and a bow in its hair and send out into the street to the tune of a jig. Tomorrow it may drown itself in the Liffey, but tonight there's only tonight and infinite possibilities for love.
Re: a comment on Sci-fi ode to poemranker nicknames by zodiac	23-Jan-04/11:53 AM
You're own of the old-time mythmakers. I'm going to read some of your posts. Sorry for taking so long about it.
Re: Crystal Lane Swift by Matthew Bennett	23-Jan-04/8:04 AM
There's already an extensive commentary on the subject at http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=75073
Re: Sonnet For a Porn Star by mikejedw	21-Jan-04/12:51 PM
First line's not pentameter. Otherwise good.