on The First Poem by jrtails
9 Oct 2002, 2:59 PM
Simple but effective. 8. I like it.
on some deleted poem
9 Oct 2002, 11:50 AM
Very good. 8. The poem has a powerful rhythm and is very evocative.
on Up The Road Aways by harrytuttle
2 Oct 2002, 1:42 PM
And your point is? There's some nice wording in places; 'slinging slugs of muck to the wind' is lovely, but the ending is cliched and dull. Have a 4, as an encouragement for future efforts.
on The Considerate Lover by Tascobar
4 Feb 2003, 6:54 AM
Genius. Have a 9.
on The shirt I wore to dinner. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
4 Feb 2003, 6:50 AM
Utter shite. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb Yank.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 1:45 PM
Nicely finished, but the piece as a whole is blunt. 5. Your language is not evocative enough to truly engage the reader and force them to empathise with you.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 1:34 PM
Cease your preaching and use your newly found spare time writing much better poetry than this please. You state the obvious, badly. 0.
on Two Towers by Tascobar
14 Oct 2002, 5:23 AM
I think you have opened a can of worms here. Dangerously offensive, but then I like work which challenges the stereotype of acceptableness. 7, for sheer bravado.
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2002, 5:27 AM
Staid and boring. I had the time of my life at university, but you inject all the enthusiasm of a twenty-year prison stretch into this poem. I appreciate you're telling us you'd rather be out of the education system, but you don't do it well. 3.
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2002, 5:32 AM
I don't like this one little bit. 1.
on Angels by Reuben Spiteri
9 Oct 2002, 11:55 AM
You've got a great name, Reuben Spiteri; almost as good as mine. Unfortunately, this poem is far from great. 2. There is nothing here to stir any kind of emotion in me. Bland as bland can be.
on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 2:49 PM
The idea of your poem is interesting, if not incredibly politically incorrect, but your execution is very poor. 1. Written with a clumsy hand, and the final line simply stinks.
on some deleted poem
9 Oct 2002, 11:58 AM
I liked this initially, but I think only due to the humourous repetition of 'bum'. By the third reading, it grates a little. 4.
on Sisters of mercy by strider1
9 Oct 2002, 11:48 AM
Highly pretentious. 2. You fail to engage me at all, and I would personally welcome it if you too went 'headlong into this deep dark pit' that you mention and never emerge again. Also, for an individual so obsessed with commas, surely you know that 'deep dark pit' should be 'deep, dark pit' due to the placement of two adjectives side by side?
on Weep for Dead Heroes by Tascobar
9 Oct 2002, 3:23 AM
Succinctly put. 7. I like the title and particularly the rhyming of the first and second lines; rare to see in a haiku.
on I don't fit in by devina
9 Oct 2002, 3:30 AM
Woeful. 0. If I had a pound for every outpouring of teenage angst that I've read on this site, I'd be a very rich man. There's nothing particularly wrong with your words apart from being a masterclass in how to write dull cliches, but PLEASE change the subject matter and stop sounding so whiny and pathetic. Look up unoriginal in the dictionary, and this poem would be there. I am offended to my core.
on Weep for Dead Heroes by Tascobar
9 Oct 2002, 3:23 AM
Succinctly put. 7. I like the title and particularly the rhyming of the first and second lines; rare to see in a haiku.
on Drug Dealer by Bazilla
2 Oct 2002, 1:46 PM
A Beatles fan are we? 0. Your imagination appears to have been stunted at birth.
on Why? by martysmiles
2 Oct 2002, 1:52 PM
Perhaps people stare, say mean things and do all the other actions mentioned in your poem because your poetry is so bad. Have you ever considered that? Hmmm? You score 0.