on THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void
9 May 2004, 8:39 PM
Not a sonnet
No vote
No vote
on 1 by Clockwork orange?
9 May 2004, 8:37 PM
Forced rhymes.
You can't cross an i
You can't cross an i
on Obituary for the Moon by wilco
9 May 2004, 2:31 PM
Good song indeed. Unfortunately a song is not necessarily a poem, though it can be. This straddles the border between song and poem.
on Outhouse by newagepoet2000
9 May 2004, 2:28 PM
You know this shit you have posted has a stench more vile than any that comes out of my own or anybody else's rectum.
on This Summers Ablaze by DeadtotheWorld
9 May 2004, 2:06 PM
And use some rhymes that are more varied
replying on Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha
8 May 2004, 6:16 PM
Pinsky's Inferno is supposed to sound like Dante'. If it doesen't, then it has failed, no matter how good it may be.
replying on Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha
8 May 2004, 5:37 PM
Pinsky's Inferno, which is on my shelf at the moment, is extremely good. It just doesen't sound at all like Dante
on sunrise at kofa by unknown^user
8 May 2004, 12:38 PM
"When the lips again begin to flutter"
And "I became oblivious, and alone"
seem to have no meaning whatsoever. Their only purpous seems to be to force the lips to a sinuous surfeit of labial consonants in recitation.
And "I became oblivious, and alone"
seem to have no meaning whatsoever. Their only purpous seems to be to force the lips to a sinuous surfeit of labial consonants in recitation.
replying on Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha
8 May 2004, 12:16 PM
Yes, I saw this "Terza Rima" category sitting in the form menu, all alone because it had no poems for company. The poor thing was so dejected and depressed that I took pity on it and decided to give it a poem to spend its digits with. Now I know that it's not entirely Terza Rima (Terza Rima it typically much longer and has no couplet at the end, but I don't have the patience to write a whole Inferno's worth, though my translation of Canto I of the Inferno is in the works) but it'll do for now to help the category live happily ever after
on To Who Ever Wrote That Roller Coaster Poem... by Fear of Garbage
6 May 2004, 7:52 PM
One third rediculous, one sixth pointless, and half-vivid.
You have therefore earned yourself a -7-
You have therefore earned yourself a -7-
replying on The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
6 May 2004, 7:48 PM
replying on Lorca's Terrible Presence (Edit) by Sasha
5 May 2004, 8:02 PM
And Catullus IS an exciting writer
replying on Lorca's Terrible Presence (Edit) by Sasha
5 May 2004, 6:11 PM
okay
replying on Lorca's Terrible Presence (Edit) by Sasha
5 May 2004, 5:36 PM
that would be "upholsterer's"
Which Russian poet did you have in mind?
Which Russian poet did you have in mind?
replying on Lorca's Terrible Presence (Edit) by Sasha
5 May 2004, 5:32 PM
My intent however was a sprung rhythm where just the accented syllables are counted, not a syllabo-tonic one where they're all counted
replying on Lorca's Terrible Presence (Edit) by Sasha
5 May 2004, 5:29 PM
I've tried justifying (the printer's term might be more fitting than the uphulsterer's) the lines that way above.
Russian's one of the three languages I was born into (the others are french and english)
Russian's one of the three languages I was born into (the others are french and english)
replying on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha
4 May 2004, 8:13 PM
I'm not sure why, but "as hard as ore" doesen't seem as strong to me as "eran de acero" (Which has an even stronger resonance with a hard Castillian "th" sound, though Storni probably didn't actually pronounce it that way), perhaps use "They were pure iron" or "They were sheer steel" though I'm not sure how the rhyme would work there
replying on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha
4 May 2004, 8:03 PM
In keeping with the original, if you want, you could use vowel-only rhymes.
For example, my translation of Lorca's "Gacela de la terrible presencia":
http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?i
For example, my translation of Lorca's "Gacela de la terrible presencia":
http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?i
replying on As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha
4 May 2004, 7:15 PM
I personally like Sappho's original better
Very good
-9-