Somewhere on that beach there are spoilt peaches. Good job, A nice addition to all our lost father poems. I shall return the ten you gave me.

O.K. sounds right to me

Touching. BTW, I love cars too

Disguised deliciousness, what a poetic idear

Ever tried Jolt? That aughta get er

?! By the way, how do you submit 4 when the rest of us mortals are restricted to 3?

Sucks huh? I especially like the third stanza.

Vivid, I can see this hore running free

hahahahaha kill it!!! kill it!!! *if it starts again kill it anyway... cuz they'll probably just bring it back a week later w/ another problem and sue u for it*

Aww that's sad. Is Bratsy's uncle your dad?

I love the evolution of the horse and the desire of the horse/narrator and the way their changing is juxtaposed against the constant use of the words "let" and "horse"- which also change in meaning. I can't even suggest any improvements.

He sounds evil. uugh. A good thing to let go of? You must be alot older than Bratsy to be feeling all this angst.

I think they may be waiting a long time.

Do you also enjoy firestarting, have problems with bedwetting? Just kidding. Cute. You should read the recent poem by Abecedarian, for a different presentation of dog.

Interesting twist to identify with the upright tree instead of the willow (especially in the willow's weather worn-ness), which most poets would probably prefer.

Interesting, but it seemed handicapped by arbitrary line breaks and the incessant capitalization of the beginning word of each line (damn the default "help" of word processing programs). For example, you made a choice, I assume, to not capitalize "lord", but then toward the end, lord was capitalized because it happened to fall as the first word of a line.

You've written a great poem, very touching.

need an apostrophe in "we're" in stanza 2, line 1. I noticed how the first stanza was telling the "you" of the good to come, like the narrator was rescuing the "you", but then in the second stanza, it was apparent that the narrator, too, planned to get something out of the relationship when you wrote "and you there with me" instead of "and me there with you". The last stanza seems to be about "you" again, because you say "fulfillment of your needs". This confusion added some depth to a title and subject that was dangerously close to the cliche. I wonder if you meant to do it, and if so, if you could make it more pronounced?

Read my poems about dogs retard. this poem is almost as rejected as nun jokes. -0- and don't try and talk to me

You make it sound so premeditated.