SupremeDreamer
on Memory by SILYLILGURL
6 Nov 2003, 2:43 PM
... im guessing that you had no inspiration for your writing today? Might look nice in your journal though.
blessed with 0.
Shams loves you you know.
Deeply stupid.
A rigorous masterwork.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
6 Nov 2003, 2:58 PM
A meditative caps-lock pilgrimage.
You know, my dad told me that one can have a job like the rest of the good citizens and still retain ones individuality.
Not being mean, but I really think the titles you come up with really need more creative influence.. but thats me, and heres a 5.
I suggest calling this: Suburbanite Anthem. Heres a 7, and exactly why do you have to go heavy on the depressed drama element? Its cramping your work, but again my opinions are just my own view.
Seems that you've decided to stick to a pattern here.. obsessing are we?
End of the road, and mid-age crisis in full bloom.
Your entire brain is a massive collection of wrong thoughts, all linked by wrong lines of implication, and all combining together to form new, even wronger thoughts. It's impossible to explain to you why you're a dunce because the web of wrong thoughts is so vast and sprawling that any brave, golden warrior who dares to challenge it just drowns in a sea of ignorance. A deeply stupid piece.
I like the way you did this. It came out well.
I'm sure you'll find out sooner or later(Probably sooner)
All strongly felt, I'm sure!
The you I want to see has wrinkled jeans on the floor, and your bed is not made. (It'd be kinda lumpy with me in it!)
Like the Marines say, "Pain is just weakness leaving the body" But you know, what doesn't kill you makes you stronger.
Sometimes memories are the hardest part of living huh?
I refer you to my latest poem, On Visiting My Father.
I shall bestow a 10 on this li'l ditty to balance Dreamers unmerited 0
Very vivid, I really enjoyed this one. Have you read my latest? I anxiously await your input.(as long as yer nice.)
I like the second one. I was that stoned once--along time ago of course.