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EAger to Offend on Pilgrimage by Christof 13 Jul 2003, 3:55 PM
Yeah, the third verse needs refining, I think. May I suggest: "...Like a TV at bedtime my shadow shuts down." Although I could see one resisting to that near-rhyme.
Rodavlas on In the Vicinity of Dreams by Blue Magpie 13 Jul 2003, 5:48 PM
wholesome, and romantic
Rodavlas on Lullaby (Finding Peace) by Miggy 13 Jul 2003, 6:06 PM
"i like it"-
some deleted user on some deleted poem 13 Jul 2003, 10:18 PM
This is great! 9.
Tahlia on unsent by Bill Z Bub 13 Jul 2003, 10:18 PM
Not really one for love poems, but I enjoyed this piece! Very well written.
Tahlia on New Forms by Rodavlas 13 Jul 2003, 10:20 PM
I really liked this, wonderfully descriptive!
some deleted user on some deleted poem 13 Jul 2003, 10:22 PM
Nice twist at the end. 8.
Bill Z Bub on The Umpteenth Home by EAger to Offend 13 Jul 2003, 6:09 PM
The only critique I have for your writing is the dearth of concrete imagery. Something to bite into, the juice streaming out in molten arcs.
Miggy on Nothing you can say by Rodavlas 13 Jul 2003, 6:10 PM
it's ok for a debut, just work harder
EAger to Offend on unsent by Bill Z Bub 13 Jul 2003, 8:25 PM
I really dig that a love poem can be clever, and dark, and NOT too sappy. Take my breath and take my tongue are great requests for a kiss. I'm sorry, you are mistaken. This is not your best work. But it might be, tomorrow. 9
EAger to Offend on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof 13 Jul 2003, 3:41 PM
This is stunning. Truly, the best poem I've read on this site. I'm suspicious: either we have a cheat among us or just a truly great poet. I can't imagine where those zeroes come from. This is a 10 above other 10s. To me it's the benchmark of the site.
EAger to Offend on Blues by Christof 13 Jul 2003, 4:05 PM
I've felt that!! The puckering lung, both physical and emotional. Dead serious and hilarious at the same time. Giving you tens (and here's another one) is screwing the bell curve, so just post some substandard work as therapy for your writer's block and everything will be just fine!
EAger to Offend on Some Things by Christof 13 Jul 2003, 4:14 PM
Where can I get your book? I can't stop reading your stuff and the computer screen is killing my eyes!
EAger to Offend on Extra Strength Tylenol by DurtKL 13 Jul 2003, 4:41 PM
No, It's not mind-bending in it's originality. But, it is well done. Can't we all just get along. *sniff*
Bill Z Bub on Optimism, pessimism and my quarter theory by INTRANSIT 13 Jul 2003, 5:30 PM
This one's worth a quarter for certain. And I'm a cheap bastard. What the hell, here's a ten.
Bill Z Bub on A Brand New Eye by EAger to Offend 13 Jul 2003, 5:53 PM
slightly abstract, but the poets will get it
akidnamedkev on Nothing you can say by Rodavlas 13 Jul 2003, 5:56 PM
"Maybe it's time that i shut up I think if you shut up it would be best for all of us.
Blue Magpie on some deleted poem 13 Jul 2003, 9:52 PM
Nice imagery, but it does look as if the curator and the chair blend into one another a bit. Also should the chair have two arms.
Blue Magpie on some deleted poem 13 Jul 2003, 10:03 PM
Remember, the more common the theme, the rarer, or more beautiful your expression of it needs to be, otherwise it becomes ...just another...
Blue Magpie on New Forms by Rodavlas 13 Jul 2003, 10:07 PM
Spelling = views, question boundful, do you mean bountiful A little repetitive on the New Forms bit.