horus8
on some deleted poem
10 Apr 2003, 7:59 PM
And another thing, ravens don't fucking soar okay they fly from point a to point b. they are scavengers that spend the majority of their time eating on the ground. Birds of prey soar... Ravens flap their wings as they go from point a to b. they do not hover, soar, do funny circles. they mostly sit and wait for an opportunistic meal.
Personally it's not that bad. I mean some of the lines don't rhyme which is bad, in my own opinion. But the idea is so unique it tends to overshadow the lack of rhyme, partially at least.
Once, I almost choked to death on a frozen milky~way bar while naked on pcp in a Mcdonald's walkin cooler.
I wish this one's for me :S
wait, can I change the name to maria instead?
-8-
:)
Be nicer if the last lines didn't rhyme. Stronger, really.
iâll recover or iâll die
both a sight that you donât need to see
*hmmmm, you're right :)*
Are you the California lottery or something. You edit as if 100 new and mundanely dyslexic poets are going to miraculously appear here one day out of nowhere and find this shit interesting. Every day, same thing, I look up and tada! there it is staring at me, your mediocrity in deafening blAck font alla baby blue.
I like this sleeker version very much. If you're thinking of paring it more, I wouldn't.
do you feel a little better after writing this? I always feel better after something deep comes up.
wonderful.
Aint Z the best?
someone likes green day...
my attention span fluttered away...boooooooring.
Why all the limericks?? Why must you shame the irish so?
rock on, baba. rock on.
Not Very Witty
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay
A horrible piece
I'm forced to say
I wasn't amused in the least little bit
Whining worse than even me
Which is hard I'll admit
A zero I'm afraid it has to be
Thats all you get
don't rape the rhyme scheme with random drivel. it hurts my feelings.
poor, poor ironshoe. next time he'll run away on his stumpy nubs before anyone else can write about him in such a gross fashion.
ONLY LESBIANS DIG PUSSIES DUDE, WORD TO THE WISE.
Good work my good lad.
aw go fuck a salad shooter.
this sucks cock. i like it!