trina_marie_73
on Dance With Me by marvelis
3 Apr 2003, 6:55 AM
nice but you could work a lil more on the ending but hey thats just my opinion :)
"Trina"
Good job!. just dont OD :P
oh, come now
nice:)
ewwww, gross...9
sometimes you f**k the world, and sometimes the world f**ks you
FIRSTLY the mudvanye fellow is a stalker, SECONDLY the poem isnt as good as some of your others and THIRD you people talk of morality but its only mere opinion, there is no galatic right or wrong justs whats funny, and i think its funny the war with iraq. After all the amount of international laws broken by the maericans will land them in shit, firstly they themselfves have peraded iraq POW's on TV breaking the geneva convention, the US government has sactioned use of cheamical weapons on iraqi soliders (in contrevention of the UN cheamical weapons treaties) and finally the invaded a country with the aim of reshime change (TWICE!!) and that goes against international law, so its gonna be hilarious when they have to go to court of this (BUSH IS A WAR CRIMINAL!!!)
exceptionally good. i too have had the same experience.
At the University of Cambridge, Cambridge, England, I have been accosted by mormons in black suits and ties on no fewer than six separate occasions. They also wore black trench coats and had immaculate side partings. I once asked one of them why they wore such clothes, because a number of my colleagues had voiced concerns that they looked rather like agents of the gestapo. Their response was that the Holy Spirit is clean so one should always try to maintain a state of cleanliness when doing the Lord's work. At which point, I pointed to the Mormon's shoe and offered him a moist tow'lette. He looked down and to his horror discovered that he had been standing in the bountiful remains of an upturned nappy throughout the entire conversation.
Not really. That last bit was a lie. But that would have been pretty damn smooth, don't you think?
oh my, this made me chuckle.
thanks for a laugh.
ita--this has a lot of potential. your last stanza is awkward; you've forced it to fit. check your punctuation, as well. nice job.
*giggles* Interesting. Yet I like the flow of it, and all, So I give it a -10- ;) Granted I dunno what a mormon is but yeah... :-\ blonde moment! lol, just messing :P Good Poem Blind =)
if i did drugs would i understand this?
Piper's Negligence
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There once was some shit in a diaper
Belonging to Baroness Piper
I consulted her mum
'bout the state of her bum
And she said she'd forgotten to wipe her.
Very good, Keep it up.
don't go!!! come back!!!
its so true, 10. glad im not on the list
you're the worst god damn poet on this honkin' website and maybe in the whole world
Hmmm.
By the way, my comments aren't all that rare. I only commnent on things I like, rather than slagging people off.