Bravo, sir!! A difficult form to master but you have done so in this gem. Personally, I don't even attempt to write vilanelles. Much too stuctured and very hard to write without sounding forced. A ten.

playing with jimson? Or have you seen the roots she lays in man? Possesive is an understatement.

hysterical, o virtual egg!

Forgot to ask...Just what brand of aquavitae are you referring to? I might try some if it isn't over 100 proof. Hell, I'll try some regardless. The stronger the better.

I KNOW YOU SHOULD NEVER HAVE WRITTEN THIS. NEVER LITTLE THEN I KNEW BUT I KNOW NOW, THIS YOU SHOULDN'T DO.

7,7,5.....I thought Haikus were to be in the form of 5,7,5 (17 syllables). Rules...who cares....I like it...8. He has been hanging out with Pee Wee Herman a bit much.

You've been reading too much of "The Art of Happiness" by his holiness the one only budamonk, Dalai Lama. For that and for being a weed wacker you get a 7. Why is there so much spacing bn. the last line? Looks and reads awkward.

I like your style of writing alot. It leaves the reader guessing as to where you will take the piece. This is good, I especially enjoyed the last two lines of the first stanzas. I met one of the top guys at the National Enguirer (Star and Globe), and you'd be amazed at how much money they give for the gossip. Spotting a new celebrity couple, before it is known, can range anywhere from $1,500-$3000. Imagine if someone took that kind of an interest in your love life... Anyway, would you please read my poem Behind Closed Doors and tell me what you think because I value your opinion and because Horus8 and his little friends are constantly giving me 0s. Me and him live near each other.

Haaaaaaahaaaaaaaa.... If you got published, I would actually buy the book. You're fucking amazing....you nailed it.

Whoever gave this a 3 is a cross bn. Newt Gingrich's hair cut and the Realians' spokesperson's big forehead.....

this one goes for idiots like Horus8 and his gang of supporters who just give 0s or 1s just because they don't like you. Please. Get a hold of yourself.

But the question is did you take advantage of the black leather couch? When you're paying $120/hr...might as well. Your poem right on...from personal experience.

Another masterpiece! The Ramada Hotel, an Indian owned establishment, full of bugs hard to identify....the one in downtown LA is out of this world....I've never seen so many baby roaches. Did you know that a roach can survive without its head for nine days? You would've had you read "Things that make you go hmmm" There's this sheme (transvestite) that I see all the time strutting her/his stuff on Santa Monica Blvd...she looks like she might be from Hong Kong...ahhhhh...I'm getting a mental picture of her saying fucky, fucky 10 dollar me love you long time.......sorry, I tend to go on tangents at times.

Bendy. Cool. kenned? ok. kenned.

Not bad. Short and sweet. Typo in last line. For ever should be forever.

I liked this but it needs editing. Too much redundancy and needless fill words. One example: "Night turning today, day to turning to night....The day dreams turning into nightmares....The cycle of madness never ending....Every day starting over and over.... Perhaps this would work better: "Night turning to day; day to night....Day dreams becoming nightmares....The cycle of madness never ending....Each day like the one before...." If tightened a bit, the makings of an excellent poem.

Wowzers! Mighty tasty jerky you cook there, partner! Here's a 10, 'cuz it's Christmas!!!

Exactly.

An exceptional read. Intriguing, like blue cheese and toe jam.

You're obviously new to creative writing. That's OK! Poemeranker is wonderful environment in which to improve your skills! Just a quick heads-up FYI. Cheers! We'll touch base later this week.