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on Ode to the inafamous dark angel by Lucifer
12 Jan 2003, 7:03 PM
"the inafamous dark angel" lol.
Topaz Servias
on P.L. I wrote this in seven minutes at 1:36am. But I hope You can get the gist by smlink84
12 Jan 2003, 7:15 PM
Bearded-Man says, "inerestingly excellent.
This is like....ummmm....a hopeless endevour?
Outside forest Elms
Hot soup is a better friend--
Summer on a spoon.
Hey all I actually posted that whole "Ode to the infamous Angel" check it out. And rate it for hatered. Not talent. And also rate the one that says if you so as rank me poorly
Doesn't exactly sound like a healthy relationship. In fact it sounds downright disturbing.
I kinda dig the poem though.
It's six lines too short to be a sonnet. What's with the capitalization?
zactly. To the point. Wel written. Up above though? I still believe in it and have faith, but no devotion. Hey Check out may I still my heart or something like that. I think that we both write love well. And many ppl do speak of you. That is one of the first positive things that darky has said. She jests at ppl that are a threat to her. Prepare she will try to twist the blade in your back.
"The sky...turns confererate." Nice line.
Why did you 1) misspell dissent and 2) capitalize it? You do not need a comma in the last line. A heartstring is one word even if there is more than one. Maybe you should "hope" rather than "hoped" to keep things straight. Other than that, I am not fond of the poem at all, but good try. Keep up the effort.
Sounds like a poem written in high school at best. But good try.
Very nicely done, shows REAL talent for this.
sorry just read the rest of your poems and i think they are slightly better than this so i will have to reduce my vote to 8
perch-er.
oh My god you actually put THAT on here, well, grr... You'll get it just you wait.....
Well, let's see, none of Dark Angel's comment are constructive in the slightest, and I don't beleive Darky votes all the time, if you leave a comment then you should vote, it's just respectful to the writers.
my freak devotion , adding of course freak for perfect pentameter. nice name by the way.
Topaz Servias
on P.L. I wrote this in seven minutes at 1:36am. But I hope You can get the gist by smlink84
12 Jan 2003, 7:07 PM
Hey Man-with-pants, better than mine, though mine was more confusing.;-) Gardez votre promenade avec Jesus!
So what if it's juvenile, Hare, it still is good ,and Kitty, he's entitled to his opinion, at least it wasn't zero, anything written in this site should garuntee at least a 1.
Birth in the bust of barbara eden.