I like the tempo and the mood; the insertion of provocative insight is nice, also.-8

This blows your trumpet, well done

perplexing.

a nice poem to read to your family. maybe you could make a christmas special, charlie brown...

I think it's a mistake to consider rhyme so important in the body of a poem to tell a story; when rhyme is forced it's phony and strained. Spontanaety(?)is an important element to producing vivid emotional poetic scenes.

Interesting; obscure meaning is nice.

?obtrusion of my center? Fill me in, I can't get it through context.

I like this. It's similar to my own feelings sometimes.

Damn right, sister!!-9

Well despite what others think, I like it, it's fun.

run! run! they're coming for you!

so, it's a girl then? or is it a ==doylum?

no. sorry, i can't. i have no vocal cords. i think it's damn insensitive of you to post this. i just haven't been the same since, "The Accident."

what is the relationship of the retriever to the shooter?

there are some lovely passages here, but some of your word choices, i disagree with. so much talk about 'heart' and 'timeless' makes it feel worn. also, i am not sure what the resolution is. i am assuming that the 'frozen angel' is a cursed lover? am i correct?

i think the low scores are due to the fact that you have basically strung together a load of cliches. the rhyme feels forced; at first, given what you were trying to say, i thought that maybe you shouldn't try to rhyme it, but then i saw you were going for a lyric--and the rhyme still feels forced. try saying this in your own words, not with a dozen catch phrases you have heard over and over again. does that help at all?

and why did you call it the north wind anyway?

Nice tempo. good poem...I think.

me likey drinky and write bad poetry. ugh.

made me think of star trek. maybe its the doors.