vulcan
on Stars Of The Sky by GTK
15 Nov 2002, 2:44 AM
it's nice.one likes to recite it on some occasions.7
I think if you use past tense(fighted/proved)the sense of nothingness will become more oppressing in the poem.
it's intersting.7
too sugary, post an angry poem
Not as good as part one. You're losing your touch. I can't help it that my encyclopaedic knowledge of popular culture enabled me to spot your plagiarism. By the way, Tom Jones is a twat.
Abraham Lincoln didn't fart. Nor does the Queen. I'm not sure if Tony does or not. Alistair Campbell certainly does.
no, and if we did? what would you do then...eat the blue pill and join dogstar with mr. reeves? why does a bum shopping cart the recycling bin...if there's no hope...to buy dope to cope? nay...to tongue hole the flat pop...before the ants do.
i'm going to give you a nine on this...be proud..i normally tear the fuck out of everybody just out of sheer distemperment. why? hardcore denial my friend, and alot lot more...this made me care about life again on certain levels, and i choose to cover the girls name at the bottom, replace it with mine, and pretend it was a note to me from someone who held me along time ago....but no more is that...no more...is me. 9. boo-hoo. col! lol! col!dol!bol!wol!
right!?try....laying on the freeway and counting differential gears...works every time.7.
Was just getting into it, and it ended prematurely, needs more ooomphh
it cracked me up !
Such a horible experience needs more beautiful words, baptize yourself in your emotion more, liked it enough - 6
very much like "sanity's defeat".but I guess there's no more a "one day".it's for that 'he's tombstone.7
yes!sounds decisive.it's really good.yes you've lost the rhythm in last line I can say.10.maybe the last satanza has no problem.but is less powerful than the rest of it.
Yet more proof that your poems suck arse. Leave this site now, while you still habe a shred of dignity.
Your'e a tasteless homophobe, you can't write worth a damn, and you're a right royal arsewipe. I'd stick a positive comment in there somewhere, but I can't seem to find one...
I get your drift......it's all good (bwa ha ha)...!
next.
next.
nice!8