Bravo! Excellent writing.

Where is the depth? My goodness... oh well. I suppose pets don't mean much to you. Or the opposite, since you chose to write this trash. 6 for you.

i really was looking for any reason to pull out my kale gun on this one.....but the last three sentences...made me think saturday morning cartoon symbolic brain washing at it's finest. jung would have grinned briefly...briefly.

alright...change the title to "the art of dreaming (screaming), and change "ground" to 'stud'...and "pound" to 'shudder' ...change the word "the" to "no" and vice versa...to create a more courageous approach to a poem that's been written 5 million and twenty eight third times. change the word "my" to 'that'..trust me...oh and switch "birth" and "death" also...this is your editor speaking...if you don't make these changes i will not be held accountable to the damages rendered.a

i expect better from you young man...fix the capital problem a whisper is always heard before a shout and it's not at all stylish...but if you did something like.....when my water runs......[i crawl swear] the crop that..........[cranium sigh]there is no healt......[cataract clear] you know what i mean? be more creative with your() and<> and ``~~~~~''//// trust me it's much more effective than just shouting...and also look up an ode...i hardly would consider this a royal point to be made...it's definitely lyric....for a run down on style buzzez check out horus8's last 5 or six poems and also nentwined does some style flaring contrasts occasional and there are quite a few others, but you'll see it when you see it, and this is only 50% there...i could whip this bastard into shape in ten minutes if i was your editor...shame realy...let me know...i might be able to get you in on my calander...let me know. carry on.h

Seems barely poem-like. More just random thoughts. As a reflection, it is good. As poetry, it is muck. Yet, I understand exactly how you feel. So 7 for you.

cool. I think I get what you're trying to say.

Thanks for the reference, Dylm, I'll share this sextuplet limerick with my grandchildren. Although sifting through your emissions on this site to find something mildly diverting is akin to groping around at midnight in a shit bog, I do like the first two lines of the fourth limerick which end with beauty and cutie.

For the sake of my own sanity I'm going to believe you're actually a grown-up pretending to be a 14yr old who writes bad poetry. This can't be serious. It's completely illogical that someone who can read could write this poorly.

What exactly is it you're about?

What exactly are you writing about?

Powerful and well written as usual.I will go to sleep thinking of you.

i see you're fond of torpedoing. i'm fond of nothing.i'm not fond of you. henchman..

Nicely written again. It works for one as simple as I.Tell Christof it was sunny and hot in Scotland today.

Yeah like the last stanza best too - especially if you wrote it in your head on the spur of the moment.

congratulations something of yours that didn't make me want to clocktower the rifle scope.

i question the question marks. otherwise it's labia majora implora and honeysuckled bee thigh. 8/10u

Original use of words and images. A bit confusing especially stanza 3. Who cares.

I liked it - again.

8 for you. I'm not sure what to say though...