Frass
on Sacrosanct Oligarch by Frass
27 Aug 2002, 9:53 PM
Yes
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2002, 9:17 PM
COULD YOU TWO TAKE IT TO YOUR OWN PAGES... you probably don't care but i get my comments mailed to me ... i don't want your 'discussion' in my msil - thanks ever so much
Yeah, well that's just bollocks, isn't it? What an incredibly narrow concept of poetry. Such melodramatic ideas as 'soul' aren't needed to say what poetry is.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2002, 9:24 PM
"it" is/are [a] THEM . . .
I never said it wasn't beautiful, I said it was good, sorry if i sound condescending, I'm sincere. It is beautiful.
Anotherday242: on your profile it says you signed up to receive comments by e-mail, but you posted no poetry. So you can't. Post something.
I just want to warn you their are people on this site who will say this poem sucks. Count me in.
No, I just meant that this person is about 95% likely to be a Blink 182 fan. But what would -=Dark_Angel=- know? He wants only a few crunchings and munchings.
Pfff. Too many metaphors, not enough violence. Were you using the maxim, "If it's hard to parse, it's probably profound?"
Maybe it's not my place to say but I do understand where Swishy is coming from. It's seems like very few people on this site understand what poetry is about. It's about someone writing how they feel and about who they are. It's someone sharing a part of them. And when someone shares there poem.. it's showing their soul. So, I think we all need to remember that. When people put there thought's on this site they are asking for others oppion.. and that takes courage. (A courage I do not have which is why I will never post anything on this site.) When someone shares a poem they are asking for criticism... but that doesn't mean when critiszing you have to be rude. Who can tell a person how you feel by by polite! So just remember this please!
It's a dirty limerick. If it didn't abuse language then it wouldn't be a proper dirty limerick. If you have any suggestions, I'd be more than glad to hear them. Stick to your mission and criticise only constructively. And so sayeth -=Dark_Angel=-.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2002, 8:53 PM
Maybe it's not my place to say but I do understand what's going on. It's seems like very few people on this site understand what poetry is about. It's about someone writing how they feel and about who they are. It's someone sharing a part of them. And when someone shares their poem.. it's showing their soul. So, I think we all need to remember that. When people put there thought's on this site they are asking for others oppion.. and that takes courage. (A courage I do not have which is why I will never post anything on this site.) When someone shares a poem they are asking for criticism... but that doesn't mean when critiszing you have to be rude. You can tell a person how you feel by being polite! So just remember this please! I have had people jump all over me for poems I have wrote before and I didn't like it.. who does? Just remember how you would feel if someone would tell you they didn't like what you said and they don't like who you are.. wouldn't you be hurt? By the way... I like this poem...you've got talent. Keep up the good work.. and you'll find yourself to become better!
You just said that. Do you feel hurt when people criticise your poetry? I do not feel hurt when people criticise mine. Perhaps you post poetry as some sort of life-affirming experience, or as therapy, or to gain approval. Otherwise I cannot see why you would be hurt. I will hit you with the cat and mother if you post that comment again.
Every time this appears on my screen, I read the first two lines and then have to actually insert my fist in my mouth so I don't scream. "in your shell you are hiding/ignoring all tidings" What were you thinking? Did you steal that from a 9-year-old's poetry competition?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2002, 9:31 PM
god'swife...yep, now it's beautiful and I can make an impact as a poet - please don't insult my intelligence by condescending to me ... grow up
Hmmm... I've dated guys like this before, pains in the arses in my opinion - but I've never been much for the 'eyes wide shut' types. The poem has some good emotion, and I especially like the line "Promises are little white lies that are forgotten over time" - how true. I would continue to tighten it up. 6/10
No. Browne.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2002, 9:20 PM
i know - it's spelled mail, not msil . . .
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2002, 9:27 PM
thanks, again