Re: Possession by Acid_moose	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	29-Dec-04/10:51 PM
mediocre
regarding some deleted poem...	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	29-Dec-04/10:48 PM
umm, well, u made an effort, which is nice, but to be frank, ur poem isnt that good, sorry better luck next time -mega
Re: Tsunami by auscot	blacksoul 204.215.33.76	30-Dec-04/1:03 AM
Great poem auscot -10-
Re: Lovelier Than Love by Bhaskaryya	jroday 204.215.33.76	30-Dec-04/1:14 AM
I like this poem very much, your skills are getting better. I bless you with a -10-
Re: Storms by Jeremi B. Handrinos	auscot 138.130.95.21	29-Dec-04/9:45 PM
You are a poet and I like your style, it says something and says it well.
Re: Twin Forks by auscot	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	29-Dec-04/9:59 PM
great work - love the imagrey - perfect 10.0
Re: Jealous over a maybe by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	29-Dec-04/7:00 PM
I don't know why others voted that way... maybe they think they are so smart to realize how stupid they really are.. great one you have here.. 10...
regarding some deleted poem...	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	29-Dec-04/7:02 PM
haha.. delight.. 10
Re: Road Tripped by Blindpoetry	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	29-Dec-04/7:06 PM
jump her men too... 10
Re: (Come find me) by zodiac	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	29-Dec-04/10:02 PM
wow - i love this truly great work - one of the best ive seen like the rhyme scheme - i give it a 10 - ~mega
Re: Fighting before bed by zodiac	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	29-Dec-04/10:05 PM
beautifully composed
Re: California triolets by zodiac	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	29-Dec-04/10:08 PM
i love the imagrey in your work
Re: Mosul by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.6.101	29-Dec-04/7:17 PM
Could not someone say it's 5-7-5?
Re: My Wife by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.26	30-Dec-04/9:03 AM
Love stanza two.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.80	30-Dec-04/9:12 AM
Nice one!! Hope you ain't a real one!!
Re: Disable by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.80	30-Dec-04/9:17 AM
BUTLERS**** You are referring to many butlers not just one. Hence no apostrophes!!
Re: Internet Inspiration (Dovina) revised by jroday	Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.80	30-Dec-04/9:18 AM
Very nice poem!! Why don't you put it under ODE???
Re: My Wife by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.11.30	29-Dec-04/10:42 PM
The sentence that begins "It's the escape I get..." is not grammatical. You have to take out the "and" to make it right. "groomed" and "trained" in the second stanza seem weird. At least, it doesn't seem obvious that she trained you to groom yourself. Also, by the time you get to "it took her years to teach", you've too many adjective clauses. It was really pretty good up to that point. Then it gets heavy-handed at the "spiritual emptiness" part. People blather on about showing or telling or whatever, but what they're really getting at a lot of the time is that it's just not likely your narrator is so self-aware. So instead he burns the dinner or forgets her name or something, to show how he's like subconsciously spiritually empty (or whatever). It would work a lot better than that whole third stanza. Actually, I'd like it better ended after the second bit. Or I could think it was really good, changed only very slightly. Out of curiosity: Do you consider yourself a feminist?
Re: HURRICANE! by jroday	blacksoul 204.215.33.229	30-Dec-04/10:55 AM
Talking about charlie?
Re: Tsunami by auscot	Dovina 69.175.6.101	30-Dec-04/11:34 AM
Why not call it Arostic? We call such events "Acts of God" realizing that if a similar quake shook the ocean just 100 miles off the California coast as it did off the Asian coast, that we would have had about five minutes warning, and as many of us probably would have died. Pleasant dreams, and respectful prayers.