| Re: two flies by suckmychucks |
Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25 |
28-Dec-04/10:35 PM |
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That is NOT a limerick.
Limerick is supposed to be of 5 lines and follow therhyme scheme of aabba
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| Re: A Short Letter by Ranger |
Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25 |
28-Dec-04/10:36 PM |
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| Re: Road Tripped by Blindpoetry |
Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25 |
28-Dec-04/10:41 PM |
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There you are!!
Personally I don't bother much about votes. I appreciate comments more because it helps me know what exactly one thinks of my poem and it helps me improve.
A 9 from me.
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| Re: Lovelier Than Love by Bhaskaryya |
Blindpoetry 68.11.192.79 |
28-Dec-04/10:43 PM |
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Votes make it more clear and exact, depending on who comments.
I liked this a lot. Didn't spot any errors. (but was i actually looking? nope)
Flowed well.
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| Re: Possession by Acid_moose |
Acid_moose 209.208.76.164 |
28-Dec-04/11:36 PM |
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This is just for my girlfriend
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| Re: Storms by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.210.220 |
29-Dec-04/2:06 AM |
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| Re: Betwixt and In Between by dougsoderstrom |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.210.220 |
29-Dec-04/2:15 AM |
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Fuck your "Buddhuist-oriented Christian Humanism", buddist don't believe in souls. And let me ask you Doug, What difference, huh? What? The fact that your writing crappy marked to crash and burn poems, yea you deserve capped on.
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| Re: Math Poem 2 by Dovina |
zodiac 212.118.14.17 |
29-Dec-04/4:09 AM |
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| Re: Storms by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2 |
29-Dec-04/4:38 AM |
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again, unselfish... beautiful.. 10
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135 |
29-Dec-04/9:33 AM |
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okay i suppose, but to be frank this is extremely long and doesnt really grasp my attention - i gave it a 5
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
29-Dec-04/10:57 AM |
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To be on the hurt side of a broken love is not very happy. You feel that all you do is glisten and glitter with tears, a prisoner to the in between, while the other person gads about freely, never knowing your pain. Or maybe you've learned to glitter and glisten in public, hiding the tears.
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| Re: Jealous over a maybe by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
29-Dec-04/11:12 AM |
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Lost her eh? Too smooth and stylish maybe. Couldn't prove it by the way you spelled smooth, what's and you're.
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Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
29-Dec-04/11:16 AM |
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The little pleasures we grasp onto to alleviate life's pain. Good job. prithee??
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Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
29-Dec-04/11:19 AM |
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If you must rhyme and use a sing-song poesy style, then make the rhythm regular. Better still, find something to say.
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| Re: Fear by auscot |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
29-Dec-04/2:11 PM |
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I'm surprised you didn't get more comments and votes. The only detraction I see is the grave of fear in the mind. Grave implies death of fear, but the rest of the poem talks of a fight with it and then again at the end, putting it in the grave. But fear is never completely dead. A good poem overall.
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Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
29-Dec-04/2:15 PM |
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Not bad except for the grammar. The soul is a concept not well developed.
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| Re: My Wife by Dovina |
jroday 204.215.34.234 |
29-Dec-04/5:07 PM |
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This is a wonderful poem to me. It brings back a lot of memories.
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| Re: My Wife by Dovina |
Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2 |
29-Dec-04/6:55 PM |
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| Re: My Wife by Dovina |
Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.54 |
29-Dec-04/6:56 PM |
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HaHa!!! Great poem!! Very much like a breathe of fresh air on the site.
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| Re: Distance by Lifeboatman |
Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.54 |
29-Dec-04/7:00 PM |
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