Re: Math Poem 2 by Dovina	auscot 138.130.95.21	28-Dec-04/8:52 PM
This poem is disingenuous, is it some sort of avant garde form of writing to scare off readers and give poetry a bad name? Please, let's make poetry readable and enjoyable.
Re: Portables by Shardik	Dovina 69.175.6.101	28-Dec-04/5:54 PM
Probably some bonsai and orchads too. Probably third generation American.
Re: My brain’s dialogue by kawakurdi	Dovina 69.175.6.101	28-Dec-04/5:57 PM
Do you think the orgasnic matter in your head is you, or are you a being separate from that matter? Something more lasting?
Re: Christmas Break by Plaidypus	Dovina 69.175.6.101	28-Dec-04/6:01 PM
What does the last part of the poem, good as it is, have to do with the first verse?
Re: Math Poem 2 by Dovina	Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.62.63	28-Dec-04/6:12 PM
jesus H. Christ.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	28-Dec-04/10:18 PM
Not bad!!
Re: Road Tripped by Blindpoetry	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	28-Dec-04/10:20 PM
"Your going to jump my men" Ain't it supposed to be YOU ARE??
Re: Storms by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	28-Dec-04/10:21 PM
Very beautiful!!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	28-Dec-04/10:23 PM
"what's wrong with me that there's air all around me and i still can't breathE" *There is supposed to be an E after breath.* A little too childish! You could submit it under PIMPLE.
regarding some deleted poem...	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	28-Dec-04/5:00 AM
got an issue, here's a tissue.. 3
regarding some deleted poem...	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	28-Dec-04/5:02 AM
the last stanza really sucked.. big time.. 0
regarding some deleted poem...	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	28-Dec-04/5:03 AM
honest, i'll give you that.. and not at all that badly written 'cept it really is slow to warm up to what you wrote.. like a diesel engine.. 8
Re: Christmas Break by Plaidypus	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	28-Dec-04/5:04 AM
haha.. good.. 10
Re: you turned me evil by baphomet	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	28-Dec-04/5:12 AM
enjoyed it.. 10
Re: To Orange by Lifeboatman	PsydewaysTears 69.240.74.35	28-Dec-04/7:35 AM
I really like the idea of what's being communicated in this poem. Though I think the title has gone over my head, and the word "proprietorship" mocks the rest of the words with its bulbous enunciation. All the other ones rolls so beautifully off my tongue but that one word kind of just... died. But still I enjoyed coming across this poemette, it whipped up a nice little smile across my face. •°•Gregory James•°•
Re: Math Poem 2 by Dovina	richa 81.178.233.69	28-Dec-04/7:49 AM
Much better. The start is a bit weak, I would say if you want to write a maths poem use mathematical terms to give the poem better precision. 'Bumping about in randomness' and 'loosely connected', are too vague. They turn the reader off immediately. Other than that there is a more obvious natural progression in this poem than the previous one.
Re: Math Poem 2 by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	28-Dec-04/9:01 AM
What the hell are you talking about? This is just shit. Mathematically, this poeme is uninteresting. Unless you're fascinated by the fact that not all operators are identical. Poetically, all you've done is sprawl out this observation in a stupid, non-rhyming, tedious blanket of guff.
Re: Distance by Lifeboatman	Dovina 69.175.6.101	28-Dec-04/2:37 PM
Too vague
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.6.101	28-Dec-04/2:40 PM
A rant, but only a rant. Carry on if it helps.
Re: you turned me evil by baphomet	Shardik 24.130.62.63	28-Dec-04/2:47 PM
Lol, New York is a mighty place. You should fit in just fine.