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abecedarian 4.11.204.152 |
6-Jul-04/11:49 PM |
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Now that's just damn pleasing to the senses. Thanks.
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| Re: Unsung california dreamin. by SupremeDreamer |
?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.101.255 |
7-Jul-04/4:02 AM |
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Are you from California? Would you say teen sitcom "California Dreams" was an acurate representation of your life?
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?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.101.255 |
7-Jul-04/4:07 AM |
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I had a similar experience when I returned from 'Nam.
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| Re: by jessicazee |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
7-Jul-04/4:32 AM |
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nothing wrong with this one.
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| Re: Why you don't fall through the floor by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 217.42.186.254 |
7-Jul-04/5:00 AM |
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The volume of the box is a³. So I understand why:
(dV/da) = 3a²
So dV = 3a²da.
But how do you get dV = d³a ? d³a = d(d(da)), doesn't it?
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edpeterson 68.79.1.86 |
7-Jul-04/5:41 AM |
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great poem. ominous. title room should be 203
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| Re: Bankruptcy (2) by INTRANSIT |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.194 |
6-Jul-04/11:56 PM |
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I was left feeling unsatisfied. ;/ Seven.
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| Re: Tale of a mermaid by sanity |
god'swife 4.231.163.56 |
6-Jul-04/7:22 PM |
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Too many 'I's. Also the language is boring.
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god'swife 4.231.163.56 |
6-Jul-04/7:27 PM |
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Get rid of 'They' in the last stanza, it's paranoid. You're using so many words you don't need. "Interpretive powers"? That sounds and looks ugly.
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god'swife 4.231.163.56 |
6-Jul-04/7:32 PM |
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I'm not sure about the last stanza, it feels like a completely other poem. Even though I like the largest stanza, it's a unique and touching insight, it's written to dryly, scientifically. Nice ending for the 3 poems. It makes me happy to know you appreciate your life.
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| Re: Rainbow by TwilightDawned |
god'swife 4.231.163.56 |
6-Jul-04/7:36 PM |
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This is the worst poem I've seen this evening. Try saying something normally.
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| Re: Virgin Bride by TwilightDawned |
god'swife 4.231.163.56 |
6-Jul-04/7:39 PM |
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Unrefutable evidence of a mind unstrung.
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| Re: The lost perfume of my yellow-rose-Girl by Prince of Void |
god'swife 4.231.163.56 |
6-Jul-04/7:45 PM |
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A dead, bloated cow lying in a meadow, high summer.
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| Re: Absolute Truth (about Quarton) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
Quarton 12.217.221.61 |
6-Jul-04/7:48 PM |
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What can I say but a ten. If I wasn't me, I'd even have a good laugh. (actually, I had one anyway.)
I love limericks. Hear is one you might like:
There was a young lady from Bright,
who traveled much faster than light.
She departed one day, in a relative way
and arrived on the previous night.
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Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
6-Jul-04/9:08 PM |
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abecedarian 4.11.204.152 |
6-Jul-04/10:25 PM |
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When I read this my nihilism surfaces and I am forced to beat it back down into its proper place.
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abecedarian 4.11.204.152 |
6-Jul-04/10:33 PM |
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This one speaks to me for some reason. Illusion of auburn is nice. Calm and patient in its passion.
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| Re: Order My Book, And $4.00 Will Go To Killing A Pop Star by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.169.249 |
6-Jul-04/11:08 PM |
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I'll promptly put it on my to-do list. nine.
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| Re: Back Slidin' by Quarton |
SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.194 |
6-Jul-04/11:59 PM |
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You wanna know somethin? You can make this into a pretty good villanelle split in two or three smashin versions or parts. That aside, heres an eight.
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SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.194 |
7-Jul-04/12:04 AM |
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Welcome back to our murderous embrace abe. Pay no mind to the neurotic suffocation or my curvy savvy-sharp blade.
Blessed with nine.
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