regarding some deleted poem...	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	19-Jun-04/12:06 AM
hmmmm, where is her gaze, i like it
Re: Cool In The Army by wilco	wilco 24.176.102.131	18-Jun-04/10:10 PM
What the sam hill?
Re: Johnny Thunders And Me by pain killer	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.61	18-Jun-04/10:38 PM
I feel this piece would be greatly improved if you edited it. Look for repetetive or redundant lines, trim it down to give it better impact and so it doesn't seem to drag on and on. Despite that, I'm compelled to give it a nine. It's honest, funny, and pushes the right buttons for me.
Re: Better Days by pain killer	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.61	18-Jun-04/10:50 PM
Smashin. Blessed with ten.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	Brittanyy 205.188.116.140	18-Jun-04/11:41 PM
This is one of the few poems that I think actually deserves to be in the top 20. Wait, does that make sense? Oh well..Great job!
Re: Its raining by caitydee	SupremeDreamer 204.31.162.105	19-Jun-04/12:09 AM
Over-all, the rain theme isn't very strong, and the ending didn't help that much at all-- reminded me of something that would be penned by a highschool girlie. Blessed with six.
regarding some deleted poem...	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	19-Jun-04/12:09 AM
I like your expresion of feeling
Re: Let Me Swing by caitydee	SupremeDreamer 204.31.162.105	19-Jun-04/12:15 AM
Certain stanzas were pretty good, but some of the other stuff such as: "Did the sun blind me that day? Cloud my eyes from reality Create feelings you never felt for me?" AND "Oh let me swing! You thought I would look silly among the kids We were suppose to go back that night Do you remember? But it rained-so we said ‘next time’" Really sounded childish or "teenaged". The rest could be revised into a more fluid and enjoyable piece. As for how that could be done? I leave you to figure that out for yourself-- it's better that way, me thinks. Blessed with seven.
regarding some deleted poem...	MR Blobby 62.31.23.59	19-Jun-04/12:19 AM
BLOBBY BLOBBY BOLB BLOB BLOBBY
Re: 0 by MacFrantic	titan69 62.31.23.59	19-Jun-04/12:55 AM
42
Re: My own personal hell by ellisonandrew	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	19-Jun-04/12:11 AM
more, search your heart
Re: Deja Vu by Jeremi B. Handrinos	arduinn 165.21.154.16	19-Jun-04/6:02 AM
Wicked..
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.8.102	19-Jun-04/6:22 AM
You mean the cliché that is your entire body of poetry?
Re: Dying by QuirkyWonder	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.8.102	19-Jun-04/6:33 AM
Hi! You know, despite our difference of opinions on opinions, I think your poemes are really good. You should try to get some of them published!
Re: Beloved Infidel by ObiWonKn	Brittanyy 152.163.253.1	19-Jun-04/8:32 AM
Ok, this poem was just a bad excuse to use big words..Haha..That wasnt very nice of me to say but..It was OK so I will grant you a -7-
Re: Navy Pier by Doug	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	19-Jun-04/9:00 AM
Hey doug, this has a very honest feel to it. Let me pick at it a bit too, hopefully focusing on things you might use in other poems. the word "can" just takes up space, really it does't convey anything except as a noun. And "still" - same thing. LEt me give you one more thing to think about. This saying you hear LMich and actually using the word "hear" - also not a big value adding word in this context. Suppose you had done instead Lake Michigan soft and stoic, cobalt breakers lilted Beer Garden breezes ... [etc.] See, the same thing is conveyed but without the burden of those words; it's [I hope] more showing than telling. Why make the reader work if they get nothing in return? But even without that stuff, this still has a very sweet feel.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.81.217	19-Jun-04/9:02 AM
Gee, you tend to get attached don't you?
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.81.217	19-Jun-04/9:04 AM
Speechless, only 'cause I don't know what to say;}
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	18-Jun-04/9:52 PM
I'm getting bored with giving you 9s and 10s so here's a 7. It probably deserves an 8 but, well, I'm drunk and I'm not gonna give ya one.
Re: Chin-up by Rodavlas	wilco 24.176.102.131	18-Jun-04/9:54 PM
Reading is masturbation for the mind.