| Re: What is that I seek again? by Bhaskaryya |
horus8 |
22-Dec-04/1:16 AM |
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A cliche homerun of shit.
Talk about forced rhyme?
What about forced plain old
Bad droll writing? This
Is a plate full of nut sack.
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| Re: a comment on Interstellar Hell by PsydewaysTears |
PsydewaysTears |
22-Dec-04/12:30 AM |
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| Re: the thrill to kill by AM I EVIL? |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:43 PM |
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that makes you go insain... It's spelled INSANE.
either way im bringin you pain...Spelled BRINGING
and its all for my ...Spelled IT'S or IT IS.
Below average...a 3!!
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| Re: Andrew part II by Spindle |
some deleted user |
21-Dec-04/11:31 PM |
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| Re: Interstellar Hell by PsydewaysTears |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:29 PM |
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Nice work. Above the "Average".
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| Re: Joanna by DR Limerick |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:26 PM |
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This is ot a limerick.
A limerick consists of 5 lines and has the rhyme scheme of aabba. Joanna and Spanners don't rhyme and this has only 3 lines. Not funny either. A 1.
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| Re: Remembrance by dragonfly |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:18 PM |
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I feel nostalgic too in a queer way!!! Nice work
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| Re: keep on digging by nentwined |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:11 PM |
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The first 2 lines rhyme while the later 3 donot. Don't you think the initial rhyme was unnecessary??
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| Re: 9/11 by TheDevil |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:06 PM |
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A very immatured piece and nothing poetic whatsoever.
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| Re: Walk The Boy To Circles by horus8 |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/11:03 PM |
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The rhyme seems forced. You could have just written that in a free verse and expressed yourself better. Good effort since it's a Villanelle (They are hard, I admit) but not exactly classy!!
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| Re: THE BEST POEM EVER!!!!!! by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/10:57 PM |
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I found the "THOU" thing pretty unnecessary as you really don't follow it up in the other cases. I won't say I hate but don't love it either. A 5!!
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| Re: One-Man Act by Blindpoetry |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/10:53 PM |
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Nah, I don't really like it. Doesn't flow too well and not too poetic either. A 4 for your efforts though.
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| Re: Recognition by nentwined |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/10:46 PM |
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| Re: The Drop by auscot |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/10:45 PM |
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What more do you need than commendation?? Not very hilarious bu a decent read.
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| Re: Recognition by nentwined |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/10:44 PM |
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I can't get you. Either I am intellectually challenged or this is crap. I rust your abilities, so I settle for the former conclusion. Do check me out. A 5 as a benefit of doubt!!
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| Re: A Wanderlust To The New by fevriere |
Bhaskaryya |
21-Dec-04/10:31 PM |
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Okay, a bit cheesy but nice work!! Just the rhyme needs a little more work. You start with abcb and end up with aaaa. Anyways, hanks for reading mine. I've posted a new one too. Look at it if you have the chance.
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| Re: The Drop by auscot |
Yikes |
21-Dec-04/6:22 PM |
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Hah, I've never been one to pen a good limerick. Very well done. The meter was a tad off in a couple lines but not enough to render distaste. Bravo! An 8.
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| Re: Twin Forks by auscot |
Yikes |
21-Dec-04/6:20 PM |
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mmm, I enjoyed this! A literary masterpiece; 10, without hesitation.
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| Re: a comment on Center Of The Universe by Dovina |
Dovina |
21-Dec-04/5:39 PM |
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Thank you. It's the very part they all complained about.
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| Re: Into My World by sliver |
horus8 |
21-Dec-04/4:34 PM |
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Any fuck that cries on a rose, and then tries to turn it into shit poetry should be SHOT.
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