Shuushin
on Catharsis by wilco
22 May 2004, 12:35 PM
Yep, thats a good one; good use of the form.
Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood.
the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well.
when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?
You have a bum-like face.
Sasha 69.138.236.6322-May-04/11:05 AM
Oh, one other thing.
If the word had been borrowed from Greek via Latin, then it could have a mute consonant ending (Like the borrowed "Iliad") but the romans took the greek upsilon ("u" sound) and always transcribed it with a "Y".
So the Romans never had it, the Greeks never had it.
I guess you must know more about Greek mythology than the Greeks themselves did.
I don't remember Tinuviel from any Greek mythology, and unless you can prove otherwise, I'm inclined to thinking you're BSing me. Here's why:
No greek words (including names) end in a Lambda or "L" sound It's always a vowel or Sigma or Nu.
Ancient Greek has no "V" sound.
So the name is obviously not Greek.
It's actually "Nightengale" in one of the Elvish languages Tolkein was making up with his more-abundant-than-is-healthy spare time.
Oh, and if you're going to attempt at proving my opinions wrong...make sure you give sufficient evidence and not just a stream of insults. You tend to think, I notice, that insults will degrade someone and make them feel bad about what they believe. Well, it won't work here. It merely shows me your inability to cough up the proof you might think you have along with civilized conversation.
-SKoP
Well, to fit the form of the "golden rule," I can't believe that this place is full of pretentious idiots. Of course, bad assumption on my part, no doubt. The whole world is full of âem, so why wouldnât this place be? Anyway, what I've seen in the past two days is enough to tell me that the mind set of many of these people, zodiac and Dark_Angel for most, is rather narrow and poorly assumptive. Both keep believing that this poem is about "religion" or a lost love, broken heart, etc. Can it be? Sure. It can deal with many area's of life, but for two self-claimed geniuses to keep believing that it merely deals with two areas of life shows their incompetence for a wider range of thought. One, this poem never has the words âreligionâ or âgodâ anywhere. Maybe you believed it was about love because it seems to be directed at one person? Well, why does it have to be a person at all? Or maybe you thought it was a broken-hearted love poem because of just the word âlove,â even though we love many things other than that of our âtrue love.â This poem can deal with religion, this poem can deal with love, but the main focus was a wasted life (seen by the last two lines). And whoever said my theology was wrong...prove that it is. Also, whoever didnât understand why I used âseamsâ then must not remember Frankenstein (which, I assumed, would be so simple to get). So, I now know that even the educated canât deduce a poem worth a flip...making poemranker.com a rather worthless place to get a good, useful opinion on poetry.
Again, expand your horizons. This poem isn't ness. about failed love and doesn't ness. have to do with religion at all. But good try anyway.
lol, you might want to be a bit more specific.
git yo ass out the kitchen, yo freaky pink bunny!
It lacks excellence.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins
22 May 2004, 12:49 AM
yes I know but i never went to see it.
touching... really...
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